Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given pictures illustrate how Grange park, located in Arnold Avenue near the Eldon street transformed from 1920 to present date.
Overall, it is evident that a lot of modifications has been done to increase the number of facilities that the park provides. However, only rose garden at north-east and two entrances remained untouched or kept preserved.
In 1920, the park had a beautiful fountain located at its heart at the center, beside a stage of musicians on its left. Additionally, five seating areas were installed at some distances at the perimeter of the park for resting. There were other interesting amenities as well like pond for aquatic plants, glasshouse etcetera.
In contrast, today, the infrastructure of the same park has been changed drastically. Fountain has been replaced by a square-shaped rose garden surrounded by seats. Moreover, many new additions had been installed, for instance a huge amphitheater has been constructed for concerts for the entertainment purpose, a café for having refreshments and a water feature for the beautification of the place.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the park's transformation well. You successfully identified key changes, such as the replacement of the fountain and the addition of the amphitheater and café. However, the report is slightly incomplete; you missed mentioning the removal of the stage and the pond, which are significant changes. To reach a higher band, ensure you provide a comprehensive overview of all major shifts in the layout. The summary is clear, and the comparison between 1920 and the present is logically structured, meeting the requirements of the task effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'Moreover', and 'Additionally' to guide the reader through the comparison. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two time periods. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing could be smoother. For instance, the transition between the description of the 1920 park and the present day is clear, but the flow within paragraphs could be improved by varying the sentence structure to avoid repetitive phrasing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'modifications', 'infrastructure', and 'amenities'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'present date' (should be 'the present day') and 'at some distances' (which is slightly unnatural). While you attempt to use more specific vocabulary, some phrases like 'for the beautification of the place' are a bit wordy. Expanding your range of collocations related to map descriptions—such as 'situated in the north-east corner' or 'underwent significant redevelopment'—would enhance your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('a lot of modifications has been done' should be 'have been done') and missing articles ('only rose garden' should be 'only the rose garden'). Additionally, 'Fountain has been replaced' requires an article. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on article usage and subject-verb agreement will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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