Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given pair of map depicts the information about a park when they are newly opened in 1992 and same park today
Overall it is crystal clear that many building were destroyed and many new building were established . However rose garden left side and the entrance remain similar .
At a glance ,in 1920 glasshouse at the south east side changed into the water feature and seats are removed from south east side . The pond for water plant are demolished new children park introduced . Rose garden on right side of top entrance are replaced by cafe . While new underground car parking are constructed on right side near the below entrance .
Moving ahead , the fountain located in middle of garden are replaced by rose garden with seats around them . Rose garden and seats on south west side are demolished . Where as stage for musicians are converted to Amphitheatre for concerts and many seats are setup for audience .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the maps, identifying key changes such as the removal of the glasshouse and the addition of the underground car park. However, the summary is somewhat inconsistent; for instance, the introduction mentions 1992, while the prompt specifies 1920. The overview is present but lacks a clear synthesis of the most significant trends, such as the shift from a more natural/leisure-focused layout to a more commercialized one. Some details, like the specific locations of the rose gardens, are slightly confusing due to imprecise directional language. To improve, ensure all data points are accurate and provide a more cohesive summary of the overall transformation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of the description. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Moving ahead' and 'At a glance'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when describing the locations of features (e.g., 'rose garden on right side of top entrance'). While there is a logical flow from one area of the park to another, the transitions between sentences could be smoother to better connect the comparisons being made. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would enhance the overall flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to describe the changes (e.g., 'demolished', 'constructed', 'converted'). However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'many building were destroyed' instead of 'many buildings were removed' and 'new children park introduced' instead of 'a new children's play area was added'. The range is somewhat limited, and the repetition of basic verbs like 'replaced' and 'demolished' suggests a need for more varied synonyms to describe urban development and landscape changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('many building were', 'fountain... are replaced'), missing articles ('in middle of garden'), and incorrect pluralization. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors prevent the writing from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on proofreading for basic agreement and article usage, and try to incorporate more complex sentence structures with greater precision to demonstrate better control over grammar.
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