Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given map layout depicts the changes took place in grange park during 1920 to present day.
It is crystal clear that,several new buildings are constructed and got demolished during the time period.
In the beginning, it can be seen that entrances stays at same places on the arnold avenue and eldon street, However the fountain in center is erased and new rose garden is introduced surrounded with seats, while stage for musicians in west side is replaced with amphitheatre for concerts, whereas the rose garden in north west stayed same.
Probing further,new seats are built in near rose gardens on the west side and in south east, also glass house is replaces with water feature. rose garden in north east was vanished and new cafe is constructed. pond of water plants erased from the layout and children play area is developed and a entrance for the underground park is established in south east near the water feature.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the park's transformation, such as the addition of the amphitheatre, the cafe, and the children's play area. However, the overview is somewhat weak; while it mentions buildings being constructed and demolished, it lacks a clear summary of the most significant trends, such as the shift from a more ornamental park to one focused on recreational facilities. Some details are slightly inaccurate, such as describing the rose garden in the north-west as having 'stayed same' when the map shows it was removed. To improve, ensure you provide a more analytical overview that highlights the overall change in the park's purpose.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the repetitive use of 'while', 'whereas', and 'also'. The transition between sentences could be smoother to improve the flow of information. For instance, the second paragraph starts with a very general statement that could be better integrated into an introduction. The referencing is generally clear, but the overall structure would benefit from more varied linking words to connect the comparison of the two time periods more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the student to describe the changes (e.g., 'demolished', 'constructed', 'amphitheatre'). However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and minor errors, such as 'erased' (which is not typically used for physical features in a park) and 'was vanished' (which is grammatically incorrect). The range is somewhat limited, relying on basic verbs to describe the changes. To reach a higher band, the student should use more precise collocations, such as 'replaced by' or 'converted into', and avoid repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'changes took place' (missing 'that'), 'entrances stays' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'glass house is replaces' (incorrect verb form). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage would significantly improve the accuracy of the writing.
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