Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The plans below illustrate a public park in started in 1920 and its in present ( Today's ) time.
Overall we can see that, In 1920 Grange park are store full of activity but in present time its develop like modern style and get more space of ARNOLD AVENUE.
In 1920, North-west side there was Rose garden and two seating areas are available but in present time there is only Rose garden available and seating are shift beside amphitheater for concerts. In past time there was two entrance in north and south side while in present time there is no changes in entry gate. there was 5 seats are located every where while in present time it is replaced by fountain into rose garden around 4 seats arrange in present time. there was stage for musicians while in present day it is rebuild in Amphitheater for concerts like modern style.
In north east side there was a rose garden and pond for water plants while cafe and children play area are located in north east side. in 1920 there was a seats and glass house but in present day it is rebuild in water feature however we can see that there is lots of change in present day but its look like modern style Grange park.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the park in 1920 and today, identifying key changes such as the amphitheater and the removal of the glasshouse. However, the report lacks precision in describing locations, often using vague terms like 'every where' or 'north-west side' without clear reference to the map's layout. The overview is somewhat simplistic and lacks a clear summary of the most significant transformations. While the task is addressed, the lack of detail regarding the specific layout and the inaccurate reporting of some features (e.g., claiming there are no changes to the entry gates when the map shows a new entrance) limits the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'in present time' and 'in 1920'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial changes being described. Paragraphing is present, but the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed, which impacts the overall readability of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'rebuild', 'change', and 'modern style' throughout the text. There are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'store full of activity' and 'get more space of ARNOLD AVENUE'. The lack of precise vocabulary to describe map features (e.g., 'water feature' instead of 'fountain' or 'pond') restricts the ability to convey information accurately. To improve, the student needs to incorporate a wider range of descriptive language related to urban planning and spatial changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('Grange park are store', 'two seating areas are available'), tense usage ('in started in 1920'), and article usage. Sentence structures are predominantly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary capitalization and missing commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of basic errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band score.
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