Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The map reflects the layout of the current park and itha

park in 1920

Overall, it is evident that park has been modernized since 1920, with several new amenities such as an amphitheatre for concerts, a water feature and a children's play area.

In 1920, there was a fountain in the center of the park, which now has been replaced by a rose garden along with the four seats nearby, which are previously located at the each corner of the park.. Meanwhile, stages for musicians were demolished, and the amphitheater for concerts are built in the right corner of the park, the rose garden located at the corner of the left side remains unchanged. In addition, the rose garden, which was situated at the corner of the left side has been replaced by a cafe.

Another noticeable change that has been made is that the pond for water plants have been removed by the children's play area, whereas the glasshouse has been converted into a water feature near the entrance of the underground car park. hence, this development brings significant changes to the layout of the Grange park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the park's transformation, such as the addition of the amphitheatre and the removal of the pond. However, there are significant factual inaccuracies in your description. For instance, you state the rose garden remains unchanged while simultaneously claiming it was replaced by a cafe. Furthermore, the description of the fountain being replaced by a rose garden is slightly confused by the mention of seats. To reach a higher band, ensure that your summary of the visual data is consistent and logically accurate, as conflicting information makes it difficult for the reader to follow the changes clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Meanwhile', 'In addition', and 'whereas' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by the contradictory information mentioned in the task achievement section. Additionally, some referencing is unclear, such as 'the four seats nearby, which are previously located at the each corner of the park'. Improving the precision of your cohesive links and ensuring that your sentences follow a clear, logical sequence will help you achieve a higher score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'modernized', 'amenities', 'amphitheatre', and 'demolished'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'the pond for water plants have been removed by the children's play area' (where 'replaced by' would be more accurate). There are also minor errors in phrasing, such as 'the map reflects the layout'. While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey the general meaning, incorporating more precise descriptive language and ensuring accurate collocations would elevate your writing to a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is a positive step. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('the amphitheater for concerts are built', 'the pond... have been removed') and awkward phrasing ('which are previously located at the each corner'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences ending in double periods or lacking necessary commas. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and proofreading for basic sentence construction errors to ensure your complex sentences are grammatically sound.

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