Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided information in the map delineated the publick Grange park area, which was opened about 105 years ago in 1920. The parks was open for the refreshment of both children and youngers.
Overall, the park is round rectangular shape which contain multiple things like seats, rose garden, water feature, and children's play area which particular made for kids to play there.
Meanwhile, the park in 1920 contains multiples seats which had fixed in their specific places. The park have two entrance gate for people, which is common in the new one. In the middle of the park Fountain had made for beautification, just left side of the Fountain there has stage for musicians, also in the bottom right corner Glasshouse is located.
In contrast to the old park, the modern park have the same entrance as compared to the ancient one. The Fountain have replaced by a rose garden. and pond of water plants have replaced by children's play area, the most significant change is the replacing of st
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the park in 1920 and today, identifying key changes such as the replacement of the fountain and the addition of the children's play area. However, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence ('the most significant change is the replacing of st'). This prevents a full overview or a complete summary of the final features. While the main trends are identified, the lack of a conclusion and the unfinished nature of the text mean that the task is not fully addressed, limiting the development of the response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression from the 1920 layout to the modern one. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate, such as 'Meanwhile' used to introduce a description of the 1920 park. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the abrupt ending significantly disrupts the flow and logical progression of the text. Paragraphing is present but the overall structure is undermined by the incomplete final paragraph.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, using terms like 'delineated', 'beautification', and 'significant change'. However, there are several errors in word choice and form, such as 'publick' (spelling), 'youngers' (incorrect noun form), and 'round rectangular shape' (awkward phrasing). The range is limited, and the repetition of basic structures and vocabulary prevents the response from reaching a higher band. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning but lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher scores.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The parks was', 'The park have', 'The Fountain have replaced'), incorrect tense usage ('had fixed'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences ending abruptly or lacking proper structure. These errors are frequent and occasionally require the reader to re-read to understand the intended meaning, though they do not completely impede communication.
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