Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given pictures depict information about a public park when it newly opened in 1920 and the same park today.

To begin with, all the seats which were seen in 1920 is diminished today. Fountain was replaced by the rose garden and new seats were added on each side of rose garden today. Rose garden which was near to entrance in the northeast direction was converted to cafe in newely planned grange park.

Probing ahead, with the remaining information. Rose garden in the northwest side remained untouched in boyh plans. While, amphitheatre for concerts was contruted in today park at the place of stage for musicians. Pond for water plants was converted into children play area. Furthermore, glasshouse was replaced by water feature in new plan park today.

Overall, it is evident that several changes has been seen in newely planned grange park like new cafe, water feature etc. However, rose garden in the nortwest side remained same in both pictures.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the park in 1920 and today, identifying key changes such as the replacement of the fountain and the addition of the amphitheatre. However, the report is somewhat disjointed and lacks a clear overview of the most significant trends. While the main features are mentioned, the description of the park's layout is occasionally confusing, such as the reference to the rose garden being converted to a cafe, which requires more precise spatial language. The summary is functional but lacks the analytical depth required for a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by awkward transitions and phrasing. Phrases like 'Probing ahead, with the remaining information' are unnatural and do not effectively guide the reader through the comparison. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices, they are often used mechanically or inappropriately. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to track the specific locations of the features being described. Paragraphing is present but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but limited. There are several spelling errors, such as 'newely', 'boyh', 'contruted', and 'nortwest', which distract the reader. The word choice is often repetitive, relying on basic verbs like 'seen', 'replaced', and 'converted'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or sophisticated collocations. To improve, you should focus on using more precise geographical and descriptive vocabulary, such as 'situated', 'relocated', 'transformed', or 'adjacent to', rather than repeating simple verbs.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('all the seats... is diminished', 'several changes has been seen') and missing articles ('Fountain was replaced', 'in today park'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence construction often feels clunky. While the meaning is usually clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and article usage would significantly improve the clarity of your writing.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.