Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The figures illustrate the changes in a public park which was built in 1920.

Overall, the common features of the park are seats, entrance from two different streets and the rose garden however there are few attractive changes like stage for musicians is upgraded to Amphitheatre for concerts moreover cafe and children's play area is also an additional change.

Initially, the Grange Park in 1920 has two entrance from the Arnold avenue and the Eldon street. On the west of both entrance there were seats and rose garden and in the middle of west side a stage for musicians were there. Later on it is converted to Amphitheatre for concerts and all seats and rose gardens removed leaving one on the west of the Arnold Avenue. In the center of the park there was a fountain which replaced with rose garden having seats on its all four side.

On the East of North gate there was a rose garden which now reconstructed as cafe and the north east corner is specified as children's play area. Furthermore, the south east side had glass house and seats which is now constructed as a water feature.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all key features of the park, including the additions of the cafe and children's play area, and the transformation of the fountain and stage. The overview provides a good summary of the main changes. However, the description of the locations is occasionally imprecise, such as the claim that 'all seats and rose gardens removed' when the map shows some remain. To reach a higher band, ensure that spatial descriptions are more accurate and that the comparison between the two time periods is more clearly structured to highlight the most significant transformations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The use of cohesive devices such as 'Initially', 'Later on', and 'Furthermore' helps guide the reader through the changes. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the sentence structure in the overview is a bit cluttered, which affects the flow. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different areas of the park. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with terms like 'Amphitheatre', 'reconstructed', and 'water feature' used correctly. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'specified as' instead of 'designated as' or 'located in'. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, but it lacks the sophistication and precision required for a higher band. Focusing on more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing would help improve the lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'there was a fountain which replaced with' should be 'which was replaced with') and article usage (e.g., 'on the west of both entrance'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Increasing the variety of complex structures and proofreading for basic agreement and tense consistency would significantly improve the accuracy of the writing.

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