Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided plans illustrates the layout of a public park in 1920 and currently after witnessing different changes.

Overall, public park undergoes different innovations and developments as the major changes includes introduction of rose garden, water feature and amphitheater for different concerts.

In 1920, public park had a fountain in centre which was replaced by rose garden with seats available along four sides. Noticeably, seats in top left corner were vanished whereas rose garden in the corner remained same. Also, new amphitheatre was built for concerts as another innovation. The rose garden in top right corner was demolished to form a new cafe for the public.

Moving further, water feature took the place of glasshouse in the bottom. Beside the water feature an underground car park was constructed for convenience of public. And, children’s play area came to existence in place of pond. Observingly, the musician stage was removed from the park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the park in both 1920 and the present day. You provided a clear overview and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the replacement of the fountain with a rose garden and the glasshouse with a water feature. However, the response could be improved by ensuring more precise descriptions of the locations. For instance, stating 'in the bottom' is vague; using 'in the southern part of the park' would be more accurate. Additionally, some details, such as the 'musician stage', were mentioned without clearly stating their original location, which slightly impacts the clarity of the report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on specific changes. You used some cohesive devices like 'Moving further' and 'Also' to transition between ideas. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some referencing is slightly unclear, such as 'rose garden in the corner remained same' without specifying which corner. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns or references clearly point back to the specific features mentioned earlier in the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the changes, using terms like 'innovations', 'demolished', and 'constructed'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'public park undergoes different innovations' is slightly unnatural; 'the park has undergone significant redevelopment' would be better. Additionally, 'Observingly' is not a standard transition word in this context. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that your word choices are appropriate for a formal report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('plans illustrates', 'major changes includes') and missing articles ('in centre', 'in place of pond'). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, pay closer attention to basic grammar rules, particularly the use of articles and ensuring that your subjects and verbs agree in number. Proofreading for these small errors will significantly enhance the quality of your writing.

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