Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the picture illustrate the grange park which chanded alot during the period of 1920 to present.
overview, in the grange park every think is changed instead of rose garden however stage of musician and fountain demolished by rose garden and amphitheatre for concerts which is for highlighting in garden.
In 1920 , beside the entrance there was rose garden which replaced by cafe over the period .children's play area is constract in the corner to removed pond for water plants and grange park have water feature to removed glasshouse.
the grange park built amphitheatre for concert to removed stage of musicians while rose garden beside the elodon street moved in the center of the park and also arrange seating area around the rose garden. in the present, rose garden remainted unchange over the period but fountain demolished.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified some key features, such as the addition of the amphitheatre and the relocation of the rose garden, the description is often confusing and inaccurate. For instance, stating that the pond was 'removed' to make way for a children's play area is not clearly supported by the visual evidence. Furthermore, the overview is poorly constructed and lacks a clear summary of the most significant changes. To improve, ensure you provide a clear, concise overview of the main trends and describe the changes with greater precision and logical flow.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphing is ineffective, and the progression of ideas is difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas, making the text feel disjointed. Phrases like 'in the present' and 'over the period' are used, but they do not effectively connect the information. The lack of clear transitions between the 1920 layout and the current layout makes it hard for the reader to track the changes. You should focus on using linking words (e.g., 'whereas', 'subsequently', 'in contrast') to improve the flow and ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'every think is changed' (everything has changed) and 'constract' (constructed). The use of 'demolished' is sometimes used incorrectly in the context of park features. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to describing maps and changes, such as 'transformed', 'replaced by', 'relocated', and 'expanded'. Additionally, please pay closer attention to spelling and word forms to ensure your writing is more professional and accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammar is weak, with frequent errors that occasionally impede communication. There are significant issues with verb tenses (e.g., 'the picture illustrate' instead of 'illustrates'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary articles and prepositions. For example, 'rose garden remainted unchange' should be 'the rose garden remained unchanged'. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in grammatical errors. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct tense usage and subject-verb agreement, before attempting more complex structures.
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