Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagram illustrates the public park when it first opened in 1920 and now major changed.
Overall, grange park show the dramatic changes in public park such as it developed amphitheatre fro concerts. However, before all seats placed to different places, but now seats are located around rose garden. opened new water feature and built new entrance underground car park.
To begin with, in 1920 grange park opened in 1920, while that same park experienced major changes. after stage for musicians transform to amphitheatre for concerts and there also have public seating area. In 1920 all seats was placed different places, but now it is located around the rose garden. Furthermore, opened new cafe for individuals and built children physical activities area. Developed new entrance underground car park in grange park. it help to reduced the car parking problem. Fountain reconstructed to rose garden in middle area of the park. they made a beautiful water feature.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by identifying the main changes between 1920 and the present. However, the report is somewhat disjointed and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While you mention the amphitheatre and the car park, the description of the park's layout is confusing. For instance, stating that 'all seats was placed different places' is vague and does not clearly describe the spatial changes. To improve, ensure you group features logically (e.g., recreational facilities vs. infrastructure) and provide a more precise summary of the transformation, such as the shift from a more open, fountain-centered design to a more structured, facility-heavy layout.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'In 1920' and 'but now'. The transition between ideas is often abrupt, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of changes. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus, such as one paragraph for original features and another for modern additions.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally basic and repetitive. You rely on simple verbs like 'opened', 'built', and 'developed', which limits the precision of your description. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'children physical activities area' instead of 'children's play area' and 'major changed' instead of 'major changes'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more descriptive and precise terminology relevant to map descriptions, such as 'transformed', 'replaced', 'relocated', or 'integrated'. Expanding your range of adjectives and nouns will help you describe the park's features with greater clarity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'grange park show', 'all seats was placed'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary prepositions, such as 'it help to reduced the car parking problem'. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that tenses are used consistently when describing past and present states.
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