Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The plans shows the information about the grange park in 1920 and same park in these days.

Overall, their are alot of new areas are add in to todays park plan.

The entrance of the park is still same but the rose garden from right side was changed into cafe and on the left side the rose gardan is still there.In 1920 there was one fountain in the centre of the park which is changed into big rose garden with alots of seats around the garden.

In past park there were 5 different agreas for seats but now the seats are only around the rose garden.The area for musicians were chnaged into amphitheatre for concerts. In present plan there are one seprate area for children to play but in past that same area is used for pound for water plants. the area of glasshouse fully changed into water feature. one main area is aslo add in todays plan, underground car parking.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the park in 1920 and today, identifying key changes such as the cafe, the amphitheatre, and the car park. However, the report lacks a clear structure and fails to group information logically, which hinders the overall summary. While the main points are addressed, the description of the changes is somewhat repetitive and lacks a sophisticated overview of the spatial layout. To improve, ensure that the introduction clearly paraphrases the prompt and that the body paragraphs are organized by thematic changes or geographical areas rather than a list-like description of features.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks effective paragraphing, appearing as a single block of text. Cohesive devices are used in a very basic and sometimes inaccurate manner, such as the repetitive use of 'in the past' and 'in present plan'. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two time periods. To reach a higher band, you should use clear paragraph breaks to separate different aspects of the park and employ a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'whereas', 'subsequently', 'in contrast') to connect your sentences more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with several spelling errors such as 'agreas', 'chnaged', 'seprate', 'pound' (instead of pond), and 'aslo'. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to convey basic meaning, but it lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. Phrases like 'is still same' and 'is changed into' are grammatically weak and lexically simplistic. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to maps and urban planning, and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The plans shows', 'their are alot of new areas are add') and incorrect verb tenses ('that same area is used'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors that impede clarity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically the use of passive voice for describing map changes, and proofread carefully to correct basic subject-verb agreement and tense consistency.

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