Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the pictures clearly demonstrats outlay of Grance park in past and current time.
Overall, there are many changes shows as compare to past like cafe,amphitheatres and many other.
Firstly,In 1920 there was fountain in middle of the park but in current time it is remove and rose garden is constucted in centre of park.However,Glass house was located south east corner in 1920 but it is demolise in present.secondly, Stage for musicians was west side in park in past.Moreover, It is reeplace by Amphitheatre for concerts.In 1920 there was pond for water plants in north east corner. But in present it replaced by play area for children and on the left there is a cafe for visitors. In addition in present water feature is in south east corner . Another main changes is seating arrangement , there was spread around in border in 1920 but in present it is arrround rose garden in center
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the park in 1920 and today, identifying key changes such as the removal of the fountain and the addition of the amphitheatre. However, the report lacks a clear overview of the most significant trends, such as the shift from a more natural, open layout to a more structured, facility-oriented design. While the main features are mentioned, the description is somewhat list-like and lacks a sophisticated synthesis of the information. To improve, ensure that the overview highlights the most striking transformations rather than just listing individual changes.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by mechanical and repetitive use of cohesive devices. Phrases like 'Firstly', 'secondly', and 'In addition' are used, but the flow between sentences is often abrupt. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'on the left there is a cafe', which lacks a clear anchor point for the reader. Paragraphing is present but could be more effectively used to group related changes, such as those related to entertainment versus those related to landscaping.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are several spelling errors, such as 'demonstrats', 'constucted', 'demolise', and 'reeplace', which detract from the overall quality. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic descriptors like 'many changes' and 'in current time'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology for describing maps, such as 'transformed', 'replaced by', 'situated', and 'redeveloped', while ensuring accurate spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include missing articles ('there was fountain', 'in middle of the park'), incorrect verb tenses and forms ('it is remove', 'it is demolise'), and punctuation errors. These errors are noticeable and occasionally force the reader to re-read to understand the intended meaning. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.
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