Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There are features of the Public Park opened in 1920 vs the same park now at this time. many features have been changed due to time and conditions. the park at this time is more stylish and facilized than at the time of 1920.

Overall, the area of the park remains same, but the features installed in the park are somehow up to date. There are seating places so far at distance back then which means no interaction or yapping while sitting with others. also, there some small rose gardens at some far places did not sound that good and stylish and occupy more place. Addition of cafe in a park means children can also enjoy snacks during the break in play time if they are feeling hungry. Parking is adding a very facilized look for the public who are visiting the park from some far places and driving for park, this parking facility can facilitate them for car parking.

Fountain and water pond has been replaced by water features which is also giving a fancy look to the public park. Stage for musicians replaced by amphitheater for concerts is a quite good decision because the need of time, it's the time of concerts not magic shows of musicians. Addition of child play area is a thing can't be ignored because due to this play area the children under 1 year can also visit the public park with their older ones.

Therefore, there are more facilities and UpToDate installation for the children than back time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the task by comparing the 1920 park with the current layout. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and relies on subjective commentary rather than objective reporting of the visual data. For instance, describing the amphitheater as a 'quite good decision' is an opinion, not a summary of the features. While the main changes are identified, the response lacks a clear overview of the most significant transformations, such as the overall reduction in green space or the shift in the park's layout. To improve, focus on describing the spatial changes and specific locations of features rather than speculating on the social benefits of the additions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The introduction is vague, and the body paragraphs lack a clear thematic focus. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as 'Therefore' at the end, which does not effectively summarise the preceding points. Referencing is sometimes unclear, for example, 'there some small rose gardens at some far places' lacks a clear connection to the rest of the sentence. The flow between ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two time periods.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. Phrases like 'yapping while sitting' and 'facilized look' are informal and non-standard. There is a reliance on basic descriptors, and the attempt to use more complex vocabulary results in awkward collocations, such as 'facilized look' or 'UpToDate installation'. To reach a higher band, you should use precise, objective terminology to describe the park's features, such as 'landscaped areas', 'amenities', or 'recreational facilities', and avoid colloquialisms that detract from the formal tone required for Task 1.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with article usage ('Addition of cafe'), subject-verb agreement ('there some small rose gardens'), and sentence structure ('Parking is adding a very facilized look for the public who are visiting...'). While some complex sentences are attempted, they are often error-prone or poorly constructed. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring consistent subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures.

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