Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The maps compare a public park when it was started in 1920 and the current situation of this park now.
Overall, it is evident that the grange park had dramatically achanged over the years. And the infrastructural change is noteworthy.
In 1920, the park was sorrunded by several seats, currently which is replaced in the centre of the park. There was a big stage for musian instead of Amphitheatre for concerts. The centre of grange park had changesd comletely , rose garden is replaced in the place where fountain was located .
Nowadays, grange park is totally separeted from old infrastrure, water feature is replaced in the place of glasshouse. The rose garden has been minimized over the years. childrens play area has been set up which is located in the upper corner of the map. In the old one, there was no cafe , however , new cafe has been established instead of replacing rose garden and the pond for water plants has been removed.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the park's transformation, such as the addition of the cafe, the play area, and the changes to the central features. However, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview of the most significant trends, such as the shift from a more formal, open layout to a more facility-oriented space. Some descriptions are slightly confusing, such as the claim that seats were replaced in the centre, which is not clearly supported by the visual data. To improve, ensure that the overview highlights the most striking changes rather than just listing individual features, and verify that all descriptions accurately reflect the provided map.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression from the 1920 layout to the current one. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the transition 'And the infrastructural change is noteworthy' at the start of the second paragraph is abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'In the old one', which lacks a specific noun antecedent. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the flow and logical progression of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there are frequent spelling errors that detract from the quality of the writing, such as 'achanged', 'sorrunded', 'musian', 'comletely', and 'separeted'. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'infrastructural', 'amphitheatre', and 'established', the range is limited. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on accurate spelling and attempt to use more precise collocations to describe spatial changes, such as 'the fountain was replaced by a rose garden' rather than 'rose garden is replaced in the place where fountain was located'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'currently which is replaced'), missing articles (e.g., 'childrens play area'), and awkward phrasing. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction and punctuation prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice for describing changes would significantly improve the accuracy of the report.
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