Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The map illustrates the changes discovered in a Grange Park when it was actually build and how it looks today.

Overall, a fountain situated on the center of the two opposite entrances are now changed with the Rose garden. Where entrances remain on the same position. In addition to this, Glasshouse , Café, Children's play ground and a new entrance for underground parking has been introduced on the new plan.

One of the major improvement is that, a well developed theatre have been introduced in the place of Musicians stage. Also the seating arrangement's has been relocate to a new place, that is around the four corners of Rose garden, which is between the two main entrances. If you entered from southern entrance, on the right side, a café is created which was previously a Rose garden space. Nevertheless, Glasshouse, and underground car park is newly established. In addition to this, pond area changed with children's play ground. and a water feature is established for plants.

Overall, the progressive growth has been seen within the time, how this public park become so popular among the society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the park's transformation, such as the replacement of the fountain with the rose garden and the addition of new facilities like the café and underground parking. However, the response lacks a clear, analytical overview. The final sentence is somewhat irrelevant as it discusses the park's popularity, which is not shown in the diagrams. To improve, ensure your overview highlights the most significant changes—such as the shift from a more open, green space to a more developed, facility-heavy area—rather than just listing individual features. Some details, such as the location of the water feature, are slightly confusingly described.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'In addition to this' used repeatedly. The transition between sentences is occasionally abrupt, and the referencing is sometimes unclear, for example, 'the seating arrangement's has been relocate to a new place'. While the overall progression is logical, the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents to improve the overall coherence of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the changes, using terms like 'introduced', 'relocated', and 'established'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'changes discovered in a Grange Park' (instead of 'changes to') and 'a fountain... are now changed with' (instead of 'replaced by'). Additionally, there are minor errors in word formation, such as 'play ground' (should be one word: 'playground'). To reach a higher band, focus on more precise collocations and ensure that your vocabulary is used in a natural, idiomatic way to describe spatial changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('a fountain... are now changed'), incorrect verb forms ('when it was actually build'), and punctuation errors, such as the unnecessary apostrophe in 'arrangement's'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. You should focus on proofreading for basic tense consistency and subject-verb agreement, and practice using more complex structures like passive voice or relative clauses with greater accuracy.

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