Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The both graph show the information about Grange Park (1920) and today.
Overall, some changes take place in Grange Park at present. For instance, Amphitheatre for Concerts has built in the place of stage for musicians.
At first graph, Rose garden and Pond for water plants found left side, whereas at the right side seats, rose garden of upper side of entrance. Similarly, beneath side, Glasshouse was found right side.
In second graph, cafe and children play area establish in the place of Rose Garden and Pond for water plants. Furthermore, seats have vanished at present in the Grange Park. Moreover, Amphitheatre for Concerts has founded in the place stage for musicians. Water feature and Rose Garden have also constructed at this time. Entrance underground car park establish today.
In short, there are many changes take place in the Grange Park today as compared to the past.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified some key features of the park, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the most significant changes. The description of the park's layout is often confusing, such as the reference to 'beneath side' and 'upper side of entrance', which makes it difficult for the reader to visualise the changes. To improve, ensure you provide a clear, concise summary of the main trends and use precise directional language to describe the locations of features. You must also ensure the response meets the minimum length requirement to avoid a penalty.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'At first graph' and 'In second graph', which are not standard ways to refer to visual data. The referencing is also unclear; for example, it is difficult to follow the spatial relationships between the features mentioned. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Subsequently', 'Furthermore') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus. Improving the flow between sentences will help the reader follow your description of the changes more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic verbs like 'found', 'establish', and 'built', often with incorrect tense usage (e.g., 'has built' instead of 'has been built'). There are also issues with word choice, such as 'beneath side' and 'at this time', which do not accurately convey the intended meaning. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to describing maps and changes, such as 'transformed', 'replaced', 'relocated', or 'introduced'. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and adverbs will also help you provide a more detailed and sophisticated account of the information presented.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Issues include incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'The both graph show', 'Amphitheatre... has founded'), missing articles ('in the place of stage'), and awkward sentence structures. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering the passive voice, which is essential for describing changes in maps (e.g., 'The rose garden was replaced by a cafe'). Additionally, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles to ensure your writing is more accurate and professional.
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