Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The blueprint plan illustrates the map of a public park opened in 1920 and present day redevelopment.

Overall, the public park changes in present day exhibits a modern infrastructure with facilities including area for concerts, cafe, children's playarea to provide more spacious area.

In 1920, focus of infrastructure was on nature with three rose gardens in contrast to today's park with only two rose garden. A downside of the Grange park in 1920 was no parking area which was solved by introducing an underground car park in the east near the water feature in present day park. Fountain was replaced by a larger rose garden with seating on all four sides of it consequently reducing the seating number from the original 1950 plan with five seating areas in different location.

During the redevelopment, pond for water plant was converted into children's play area with a water feature at the right most corner of park. The original plan did not include any eating area so a cafe was constructed near the north entrance right next to children's play area. The old structure of stage for musicians was replaced by amphitheater for concerts with seating area to accommodate people. Only feature of the park that had no change were the entrance in the south and north in the centre of the park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all key features of the two maps, including the addition of the underground car park, the cafe, the amphitheater, and the changes to the rose gardens and water features. The overview is clear and identifies the main trend of modernization. However, there are some inaccuracies in the details; for instance, the student mentions a '1950 plan' which is not present in the prompt, and the description of the seating changes is slightly confusing. Despite these minor issues, the response effectively highlights the transformation of the park from a nature-focused space to a modern recreational facility, meeting the requirements of the task well.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The progression of ideas is generally clear, moving from the general changes to specific infrastructure updates. Cohesive devices such as 'In 1920', 'In contrast to', and 'During the redevelopment' are used effectively to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the referencing of specific locations (e.g., 'right most corner') could be more precise. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different aspects of the park's evolution.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with some attempts at more sophisticated terminology such as 'redevelopment', 'infrastructure', and 'amphitheater'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'blueprint plan' (which is redundant) and 'seating number' (which should be 'number of seats'). The student demonstrates a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the changes clearly, though there is room for more precise descriptive language to reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as missing articles ('Fountain was replaced', 'near the north entrance') and minor punctuation issues. The sentence structure is generally sound, but there is a lack of variety in complex grammatical forms. The errors present do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score in this criterion.

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