Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given below maps picture shows the public park open in 1920 and other picture shows current development in park.

In 1920 Grange park was like from entrance both side was rose garden and just next to entrance there was a seats but in todays time west side rose garden was change with cafe and on right side there was pond for water plants in 1920 but now there is a children's play area and in 1920 there fountain in centre of the Arnold avenueand in current time there is a rose garden surround with seats in 1920 fountain left side there was a stage for musicians but in current time there is Amphitheatre for cincerts.

In 1920 from the other Entrance from Eldon street

there was glasshouse on right side and rose garden on left side next to entrance there was a seats on left side but in current time glasshouse was change with water feature rose garden was removed and there is empty place now.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the rose garden, cafe, and amphitheatre. However, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or summary of the most significant changes. The information is presented as a list of individual changes rather than a cohesive comparison. While the key features are identified, the lack of a clear introduction and a distinct overview paragraph limits the score. To improve, you should provide a clear summary statement that highlights the most noticeable trends, such as the park's transition from a more ornamental space to one focused on recreational facilities.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into three paragraphs, which is a logical approach. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'in 1920' and 'in current time' are used repeatedly, making the flow feel mechanical. There is a lack of varied linking words to connect ideas within sentences or between paragraphs. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'there was a seats', which makes the progression of information feel disjointed. Improving the variety of transition signals and ensuring clear subject-verb agreement would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple descriptors like 'change' and 'there was'. There are also several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'current time' instead of 'the present day' or 'currently', and 'cincerts' (spelling error). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning of the changes, it lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. To improve, try to incorporate more descriptive verbs and nouns related to urban planning, such as 'replaced', 'converted', 'transformed', or 'facility'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are consistent issues with articles ('a seats', 'the fountain'), subject-verb agreement ('rose garden was change'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack necessary prepositions. While you attempt to describe complex changes, the lack of control over basic grammar, such as tense consistency (mixing past and present incorrectly), limits the score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring that your verbs match the time frame of the description (past for 1920, present for today) is essential.

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