Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

A BELOW BLUEPRINT ELABORATES HOW A PUBLIC GARDAN LOOKS WHEN IT OPEN FIRST TIME 1920 AND AND CURRENT MODIFICATION.

OVERALL, SOME FEATURES ARE COMPLETELY REPLACED IN TODAY'S PLAN, AND A SEATING AREA WHICH WAS IN PREVIOUSLY IN YEAR 1920 IS COMPLETELY VANISH FROM THE CURRENT PLAN AND SOME OF IT ARE UNTOUCHED.

TO BEGINS WITH 1920 YEAR, THERE ARE A LOT OF PLACES WHERE VISITORS CAN SEAT THERE AT THREE CORNER OF EXCEPT TOP RIGHT CORNER AS WELL AS IT WAS LEFT SIDE OF BOTH ENTRANCE. MOREOVER, THE ENTRANCES IN CENTER NORTH AND SOUTH SIDE OF PARK BESIDES ABOVE ENTRANCE THERE IS ROSE GARDEN ON RIGHT AND BELOW ENTRANCE RIGHT THERE'S A GLASSHOUSE. NORTH-EAST SIDE HAS A POND FOR WATER PLANTS. IN THE CENTER THERE WAS A FOUNTAIN AND IT'S LEFT HAS A STAGE FOR MUSICIANS IN IT'S BOTH UP AND UNDER HAS A ROSE GARDEN.

CURRENTLY, THE STAGE FOR MUSICIANS IS REPLACE WITH THE AMPHITHEATRE FOR CONCERTS AND FOUNTAIN WITH ROSE GARDEN WITH SEATS

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the task by describing the changes between 1920 and the present. However, the report is incomplete. You failed to mention several key features, such as the children's play area, the new water features, or the removal of the rose gardens. The summary of the 'current' state is very brief and lacks the necessary detail to provide a comprehensive overview. To improve, ensure you systematically compare all major changes shown in the diagrams rather than focusing only on a few elements. The overview is present but lacks sufficient detail regarding the extent of the transformation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps with organization. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'TO BEGINS WITH' and 'IN IT'S BOTH UP AND UNDER'. The progression of ideas is somewhat confusing, particularly when describing the layout of the park. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships between the features mentioned. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your descriptions of location are precise and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'GARDAN' instead of 'garden' and 'VANISH' used incorrectly as a verb form. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the changes in a park effectively; for example, you rely on basic verbs like 'replace' and 'look'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise descriptive language related to urban planning, such as 'transformed', 'converted', 'relocated', or 'expanded', and ensure correct word forms are used throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('A SEATING AREA... ARE UNTOUCHED'), incorrect tense usage ('LOOKS WHEN IT OPEN FIRST TIME'), and misuse of articles and prepositions. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that tenses are used consistently when describing past and present states.

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