Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
This two map illustrate the significant changes that have taken place at Grange Park between 1920 and the present day. The several old features such as the stage of musucians, fountain, pond and glasshouse, have been remmoved and new facilities including a cafe, children’s play area, amphitheatre and water feature, have been added in mordern grange park.
There was a stage for musicians on the western side and a fountain was located in the center. There were rose gardens in the north-west, north-east and south-west and also a pond for water plants was in the north-east on top of seats. A glasshouse was in the south-east nearby entrance. The many seats were placed around the park.
In today the stage has been replaced by an amphitheatre for center and the fountain has been replaced by a rose gardern in the center. The old glasshose has been replaced by water feature in the south-east and glasshouse has been removed. Also the old pond for water plants has been replaced by cafe and children’s play area in the north-east. There is also an underground car park rntrance from eldon street.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all key features of the two maps, identifying the major changes such as the removal of the stage and fountain and the addition of the cafe and amphitheatre. The overview is clear, and the information is logically selected. However, the response could be improved by providing a more analytical comparison rather than just listing changes. For example, noting the shift from a more traditional, nature-focused layout to a modern, facility-oriented design would elevate the response. The inclusion of specific locations (e.g., 'north-east') is accurate and helps the reader visualize the changes effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into three paragraphs, which is appropriate for this task. There is a clear progression from an introduction to a description of the past and then the present. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In today' and 'Also', though some transitions feel slightly mechanical. The referencing is generally clear, although the sentence structure in the final paragraph is a bit repetitive. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between the description of the past and the present would help achieve a higher band score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, with terms like 'amphitheatre', 'glasshouse', and 'underground car park' used correctly. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'musucians', 'remmoved', 'mordern', 'gardern', and 'glasshose'. These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding the content. To improve, focus on proofreading for common spelling mistakes and try to incorporate more sophisticated synonyms for 'replaced' or 'removed' to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'This two map illustrate' (should be 'These two maps illustrate') and 'In today' (should be 'Today' or 'In the present day'). Additionally, there are issues with article usage and prepositional phrases, such as 'for center' instead of 'in the center'. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors limits the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent article usage will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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