Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given diagrams presents information of changes that occurred in public park from 1920 to till now.
As an overview, most of the buildings in central part were demolished and rebuilt in central part of park such as rose garden was built on place of fountain. Moreover, corners of parks also went through several changes.
At the first glance, there was pond for water plants in north-eastern side of park which was destroyed and children's park was erected there. In the north-western and south-western side of park there were seats which are now removed ; furthermore, Amphitheatre for concerts is constructed in west side of park.
Additionally, in 1920 stages for musicians and a fountain was located at that place which are now demolished and a rose garden with few seats around them is created on the site. However, few of areas of the park remained intact as entrance of both sides and eldon street both were on same location ; meanwhile, a new entrance for underground car park was built in south-east.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the park's transformation, including the demolition of the fountain and the addition of the rose garden and amphitheatre. You successfully identify the key changes and note the areas that remained unchanged, such as the entrances. However, the overview is slightly repetitive, mentioning the 'central part' twice in the same sentence. To reach a higher band, ensure the overview provides a more concise summary of the most significant trends rather than listing specific details, which should be reserved for the body paragraphs. Overall, the task is addressed clearly and the main features are highlighted effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, moving from an overview to specific details. You use cohesive devices such as 'moreover', 'at the first glance', 'furthermore', and 'additionally' to link ideas. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical or are used in contexts that do not perfectly fit the flow of the information. For instance, 'at the first glance' is more commonly used for personal impressions rather than describing a map. Improving the variety and naturalness of your linking words will help the progression of your ideas feel more seamless and professional.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'demolished', 'erected', 'intact', and 'underground car park'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as '1920 to till now' (which is redundant) and 'on place of fountain' (should be 'in place of the fountain'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning, it lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. Focusing on more precise descriptive verbs and avoiding redundant phrasing will strengthen this area.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('in north-eastern side', 'in west side') and subject-verb agreement ('diagrams presents'). Additionally, the punctuation around the semicolon in the third paragraph is slightly awkward. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, pay closer attention to the use of definite articles with geographical locations and ensure that your verb forms consistently match the plural or singular subjects.
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