Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The blue print below shows in the proportion, a public garden when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

In the commence garden name was a Grange park so, in 1920 this garden has 2 gates one is located on the northern side named arnold avenue and second is located on the southern side named eldon street. There are three rose gardens in that two gardens are at right and left side of the arnold avenue both and third one is on western side of corner. This park contains fountain , stage for musicians in middle, pond for water plants and glass house at both east corners. Park was surrounded with five seats.

Secondly, In today's period grange park was been changed. On the western side an amphitheatre is made for concerts and in middle having a rose garden surrounded with four seats and one garden is as same as in past, cafe and children's play area is new located on eastern side. Water feature is located at corner of north side and also available underground car park.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have identified the main features of the park in both 1920 and the present day, such as the gates, rose gardens, and the addition of the amphitheatre and car park. However, the response lacks a clear overview, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. The description is somewhat fragmented, and some details, such as the 'five seats' or the specific locations of the glass houses, are presented without a clear comparative structure. To improve, ensure you provide a summary paragraph that highlights the most significant changes, such as the shift from a decorative garden to a more functional public space.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression from the past to the present. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'In the commence garden name was...' and 'Secondly, In today's period...'. These transitions feel unnatural. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track the location of specific features. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite repetitive and lacks precision. Phrases like 'is made', 'is new located', and 'as same as' are simplistic and occasionally grammatically awkward. You rely on basic descriptors rather than using more specific terminology related to maps and urban planning, such as 'transformed', 'replaced', 'situated', or 'adjacent to'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary to describe spatial relationships and changes over time, and focus on using words in their correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with verb tenses and word order. For example, 'In the commence garden name was a Grange park' is confusing, and 'grange park was been changed' is grammatically incorrect. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'In that two gardens are at right and left side...'. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice, which is essential for describing map changes.

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