Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The below plan describes that it was a public park it was opened in the year 1920 and their is a development compared to today and in the past 1920 opened year.
Firstly there is grange park it is opened in 1920, it has two entrances opposite and it has three of rose gardens as well it has fountain in the middle of the park and there is a Glasshouse which is located right side of the Entrance and also they located some of the seats at corners of the park and beside of the entrances as well they were build an a stage for musicians beside of the fountain. and there is also a Arnold avenue. At lastly there is also pond for water plants.
Coming to today the grange park they added some more facilities and also they changed the locations of the park. In the middle there is Rose garden around it there are four seats. and also there is water feature which is located in the right side of the Entrance and also there is an a children's play area beside that there is small beautiful cafe which is to the children's park. At lastly there is a Amphitheatre for concerts. coming to present day the removal of stage for musicians, fountain and water pond.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the park in 1920 and today, but the overview is weak. The introduction is repetitive and lacks a clear summary of the most significant changes, such as the shift from a formal garden layout to a more recreational space. While you identify key features like the rose garden and the amphitheatre, the comparison between the two time periods is somewhat mechanical. To improve, ensure you provide a clear, concise overview in the introduction that highlights the primary transformation of the park, rather than just listing features in a chronological sequence.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite basic and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'and also' and 'at lastly'. The transition between ideas is often abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'which is to the children's park'). To reach a higher band, you should use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your sentences and ideas more fluidly, and ensure that your paragraphing is used to group related information more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher score. You rely on simple descriptors like 'small beautiful' and 'added some more'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'they located some of the seats' instead of 'seats were situated'. To improve, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to maps and urban planning, such as 'replaced', 'transformed', 'converted', or 'situated'. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and verbs will help you convey the changes more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include incorrect article usage ('an a children's play area'), subject-verb agreement ('there is three of rose gardens'), and awkward sentence construction ('the removal of stage for musicians'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many run-on sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structure, particularly the use of articles and pluralisation, and work on reducing the number of errors in your complex sentences to ensure your meaning is always clear.
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