Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The plans display Grange park when it opened initially in 1920 and the same park today.

Overall, the public park has undergone a significant redevelopment. New facilities such as children's play area, water feature and amphitheatre for concerts have been introduced, while some facilities remained at the same position. Also, some facilities were demolished and replaced with new ones.

In 1920, Grange park had a fountain at the center of the park with a stage for musician at the western part of the park. There were three seats, three rose gardens, glasshouse and a pond for water plants. Moreover, the park had two entrances located at the southern and northern part of the park.

Today, a remarkable redevelopment is observed. a underground car park has been constructed. The glass house was demolished and replaced with a water feauture. Similarly, the pond for water plants is replaced with children's play area. Additionally, the fountain have been demolished and a rose garden is at the center of the park with four seats and its sides. Furthermore, there is an amphitheatre for concerts, which is at the western part of the map.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the park in both 1920 and the present day. You provided a clear overview and made relevant comparisons, such as noting the demolition of the glasshouse and the addition of the amphitheatre. To reach a higher band, ensure you provide more precise detail regarding the locations of features; for example, you mention the rose garden is at the center, but you could more clearly contrast this with the previous location of the fountain. Overall, the response covers all requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs focusing on the two time periods. You use cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'Similarly', and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, the progression between sentences is occasionally slightly mechanical. To improve, try to vary your linking phrases and ensure that the transition between the description of 1920 and the present day is smoother. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different stages of the park's development.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'redevelopment', 'demolished', and 'amphitheatre' correctly. There are some minor spelling errors, such as 'feauture' instead of 'feature' and 'a underground' instead of 'an underground'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, incorporating more precise collocations or varied synonyms for 'park' or 'facilities' would help elevate the score. The current range is functional but lacks the flexibility required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is consistently clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'the fountain have been demolished' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'at the western part of the map' (preposition choice). Additionally, there are minor punctuation and capitalization issues, such as starting a sentence with a lowercase 'a' in the final paragraph. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent use of articles. The errors present do not impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score.

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