Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided maps compare the layout of the Grange park in 1920 and how it looks today after renovation.

Overall, the public park has undergone significant changes after it's redevelopment. The major changes include a water feature, underground car park, the removal of the fountain, an inclusion of children's play area and reconstruction of musicians' stage into amphitheatre for concerts.

In 1920, a fountain was located at the center of the park. Left to that, a stage for musicians was situated. There were five seating arrangements at the sides of the park, three of which were surrounded by rose gardens. A glasshouse can be noticed at the bottom-right corner. At the top-right corner ponds for water plants was located and the park had two main entrance, one at the top center and another at the bottom center.

Today, the pond at the top-right corner has been changed to a play area for children and in the former rose garden in front of that is now a cafe. Both the entrances remained same, whereas the seats are now at the former fountain

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the park in both 1920 and today. You have successfully identified key changes such as the addition of the water feature, the car park, and the conversion of the stage into an amphitheatre. However, the description is incomplete; you missed mentioning the new rose garden, the removal of the glasshouse, and the addition of the underground car park. To reach a higher band, ensure that all significant changes are reported. The overview is clear, but the final paragraph ends abruptly without fully describing the current layout, which limits the development of the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices like 'In 1920' and 'Today' to signal time shifts. However, the transition between the description of the past and the present is somewhat mechanical. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final sentence where you mention 'the seats are now at the former fountain' without clearly explaining the spatial relationship or the full extent of the current seating. Paragraphing is used appropriately, but the flow between sentences could be smoother with more varied linking words.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'redevelopment', 'amphitheatre', and 'reconstruction'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'Left to that' (should be 'To the left of that') and 'remained same' (should be 'remained the same'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. Expanding your repertoire of descriptive verbs and spatial prepositions would improve the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that, while not impeding communication, are noticeable. For example, 'after it's redevelopment' contains a misuse of the possessive pronoun (should be 'its'), and 'ponds for water plants was located' has a subject-verb agreement error ('ponds' is plural, so it should be 'were'). Additionally, 'there were five seating arrangements at the sides of the park' is slightly awkward. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will help you achieve a higher score in this criterion.

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