Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The two diagram illustrate a public park constructed in 1920 and the changes that have been made to the park as of today.
Overall, the Grange park has been completely redesigned as compared to the past. Many thinks have been added such as Amphitheatre, cafe, children's playground, while replacing things like fountain, pond, glasshouse and so on.
Detailed analysis of these diagrams showcase the removal of fountain from the middle of the park by replacing it with a rose garden with seats along its four sides. The pond which was used for water plants has been converted into a children's play area and the rose garden just at the left of the pond has also been reconstructed into a cafe. The glasshouse at the bottom right of the map has been converted into a water feature along with an entrance to the underground car park.
In addition to this, rose garden, stage of musicians as well as some seats have been removed from the bottom left side of the map and a Amphitheatre has been constructed which is mainly used for concerts now. All the seats from all around the map have been placed at the middle of the map surrounding the rose garden.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all key features of the two maps, effectively highlighting the major changes such as the removal of the fountain and the addition of the amphitheatre. The overview provides a clear summary of the transformation. However, the description of the locations is occasionally imprecise, such as stating the rose garden was 'just at the left of the pond' when the map shows it differently, and the claim that 'all the seats' are now in the middle is a slight over-generalisation. Despite these minor inaccuracies in spatial reporting, the response successfully identifies the main trends and provides a logical comparison between 1920 and the present day.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is logically organised with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs that group information by area or feature. Cohesive devices such as 'In addition to this' and 'Detailed analysis' are used to guide the reader. However, the paragraphing could be more refined; the second body paragraph is somewhat dense. Referencing is generally clear, though some transitions between sentences feel slightly mechanical. Overall, the information flows well, and the progression of ideas from the general overview to specific details is easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, using terms like 'redesigned', 'converted', and 'constructed'. There are some minor errors in word choice and form, such as 'Many thinks' instead of 'Many things' and the incorrect article usage in 'a Amphitheatre'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning clearly, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for higher bands. The repetition of 'map' and 'side' suggests a limited range of descriptive language for spatial orientation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'The two diagram illustrate' (subject-verb agreement) and 'removal of fountain' (missing article). Additionally, punctuation is occasionally inconsistent. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. The attempt at complex structures is present, but the control over these structures is not consistent throughout the text.
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