Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The maps comprise a public park when it first time open in 1920 and present conditions of park.
Overall park are redesigned at present and add some extra features for people to build amphitheaters for concerts and entrances underground parking.
In 1930 when parked is open first time it has a fountain at it’s centre while entrance is available at two side of fountain and have a simple old stage for singer where the musicians can sing the roe song for entertainment and seats can built for sitting but with a large distance along with walls of park two rose houses was built along with the wall of Arlington evenness street from the left and right of entrance and one garden at left of eldon street entrance.
At the present the rose garden build at the centre of garden and made seats around the garden for sitting there fragrance of flowers spread .Convert the old stage into amphitheater for concert and children’s play area was separate at north left corner while at left button side also use for entrance underground parking and upper side constrat water pool
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the park in 1920 and the present day, identifying key changes such as the amphitheater and underground parking. However, the description is somewhat disorganized and lacks a clear overview of the most significant transformations. Some details, such as the specific locations of the rose gardens and the entrance, are described in a confusing manner, making it difficult for the reader to visualize the changes accurately. To improve, ensure that the main trends are highlighted in the introduction and that the body paragraphs follow a logical spatial progression.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear paragraph structure, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of information. While there is an attempt to contrast the past and present, the use of cohesive devices is limited and often mechanical. For example, phrases like 'At the present' and 'In 1930' are used, but the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed. The lack of clear transitions between the description of the 1920 layout and the current layout hinders the overall readability. Improved paragraphing and a wider range of linking words would significantly enhance the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, with several instances of awkward phrasing or incorrect word choices, such as 'left button side' instead of 'bottom-left' and 'constrat water pool'. There is an attempt to use descriptive language, but it often lacks precision. The student relies on basic vocabulary to describe the features of the park. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more precise terminology related to maps and spatial descriptions, such as 'situated', 'adjacent to', 'transformed', and 'replaced'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('park are redesigned', 'rose garden build'), tense consistency (switching between past and present incorrectly), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, making them difficult to parse. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring consistent verb tenses would help improve the clarity and accuracy of the writing.
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