Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The public park that first opened in 1920 "The Grange Park" between Arnold avenue and Eldon street had many prominent features for that year but as of today the park has evolved in many ways some things removed and added too that will be discussed today.
In 1920 the park had 2 entrance exactly opposite of each other one at Arnold avenue and other one at Eldon avenue, there were 3 rose gardens, pond for water plants, a glasshouse with a fountain in the middle of the park. For public attraction the park also had a doomed stage for musicians with 4 different seated view points for public and 1 on the opposite end of the park.
Today the park had seen many changes in it such as the fountain was converted into rose garden with seats all round it, right beside entrance of Arnold avenue a café was created with children's play area next to it, stage for musicians was also converted into amphitheater for concerts, glasshouse was removed to make room for water feature and lastly a underground car parking was created.
The main features of Grange Park has changed a lot and many features have been removed and added but the changes made are viable of this time.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the park in both 1920 and the present day. You successfully identified key changes, such as the removal of the glasshouse and the addition of the café and car park. However, the overview is somewhat weak; while you mention that the park has evolved, a more effective summary would highlight the most significant transformations, such as the shift from a more ornamental, quiet space to a modern, facility-oriented park. The description of the layout is generally accurate, though some details, such as the specific locations of the rose gardens, could be more precisely described to better guide the reader through the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each time period, and a brief conclusion. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical. You rely heavily on simple conjunctions and lack a variety of cohesive devices to link ideas more fluidly. For instance, the transition between the description of the 1920 features and the present-day changes could be smoother. Additionally, the punctuation is inconsistent, particularly the lack of full stops between independent clauses, which creates run-on sentences that hinder the overall readability and logical progression of your points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'prominent features', 'evolved', 'amphitheater', and 'viable'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'doomed stage' (likely meant 'domed') and 'viable of this time'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to spatial description and change, such as 'transformed', 'replaced by', or 'situated', and ensure that your spelling is accurate to maintain a professional tone.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding punctuation and article usage. For example, '2 entrance' should be 'two entrances', and 'opposite of each other' is slightly unnatural. The lack of proper sentence boundaries (e.g., '...Eldon avenue, there were 3 rose gardens...') results in comma splices. While you attempt complex structures, the control is inconsistent. Improving your grasp of subject-verb agreement and ensuring each sentence is correctly punctuated would significantly enhance the clarity and grammatical accuracy of your writing.
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