Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given pair of maps compares a Arnold avenue of Grande park in 1920 and the same Arnold avenue of the same park today these maps depict all four sides of Arnold avenue with details overall,it can seen that Arnold avenue went through several prominent changes in terms of area in 1920 and now today the entrance are same of both sides in 1920 map the very left side off entrance first seats and beside rose garden and at the corner of this side some seats and the right side off the entrance a rose garden and the right corner pond of water and and the entrance from the Eldon street left side some seats and rose garden and at the corner some seats and the right side glasshouse and in the middle of the avenue a foundation and the left side of foundation a stage for musicians now today in middle a rose garden and all sides off rose garden seats and left side a amphitheatre for concerts and the Eldon street antrance right side a water feature the other entrances left side a cafe and pond off waters plant build now and the left side a rose garden
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to describe the changes in the park, but it fails to provide a clear, structured overview. While it mentions some features, the description is disorganized and lacks a logical progression. The information is presented in a fragmented manner, making it difficult to follow the comparison between 1920 and today. Key features are mentioned, but the lack of clear grouping (e.g., by location or type of facility) means the main trends are not effectively highlighted. To improve, you should group information into clear paragraphs and provide a concise summary of the most significant changes in an introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is written as a single, long paragraph without any sentence punctuation, which severely impacts readability. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the progression of information is confusing. The text relies on repetitive phrasing like 'left side' and 'right side' without using transition words or logical connectors to guide the reader. To improve, you must use full stops to separate sentences and employ cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' to show the relationship between the different parts of the park and the changes over time.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic directional language ('left side', 'right side') and struggle with precise terminology for park features. For example, 'foundation' is used instead of 'fountain', and 'pond of waters plant build' is unclear. There are also issues with word choice and spelling, such as 'antrance' instead of 'entrance'. To improve, try to use more specific vocabulary related to maps and urban planning, such as 'situated', 'replaced by', 'transformed', or 'adjacent to', and ensure you use the correct terminology for the features shown in the diagrams.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical control is very weak. The entire response consists of a single run-on sentence with no capital letters or periods, which makes it grammatically incorrect. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, article usage, and word order. For instance, 'it can seen' should be 'it can be seen', and 'now today' is redundant. The lack of punctuation makes it impossible to assess your ability to use complex sentence structures. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring each sentence has a clear subject, verb, and proper punctuation before attempting more complex structures.
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