Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given map demonstrates the blueprints of a park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today the park is located between a avenue and a street.
overall it shows two maps of the same park.
first map is from past where we can see a significant difference from todays appearance of this park.
Firstly , in 1920 their are many things that are replaced by the other things in todays map. Like the stage for Musicians are now replaced by the Amphitheatre for concerts. Furthermore , the fountain that was present in the middle of the park is also replaced by the Rose Garden and besides this there are seats that has been installed for visitors to take some rest. In addition , rose garden is also replaced by Café.
Secondly , the pond for water plants was also replaced by the children's play area where the children can play while their parents are enjoying the concert. In addition water feature is also be made by replacing the glasshouse that was present in 1920s map. And now there is only one rose garden near the concert area.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the park in 1920 and today, identifying key changes such as the replacement of the glasshouse and the addition of the amphitheatre. However, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview. The description is somewhat repetitive, and the information is not always accurate; for instance, the text mentions a 'rose garden' being replaced by a 'café' and then later mentions a 'rose garden' near the concert area, which creates confusion. To reach a higher band, you should group information more logically (e.g., by area or by type of facility) and ensure the comparison between the two time periods is precise and easy to follow.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The introduction is fragmented, and the transition between the two main body paragraphs is abrupt. While some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'In addition', and 'Secondly' are used, they are often applied mechanically. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when describing the location of features. The overall structure feels like a list of changes rather than a cohesive summary of the map's evolution. Improving the use of linking phrases and ensuring each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely heavily on the word 'replaced' throughout the text, which makes the writing repetitive. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'blueprints of a park' (a map or plan is more appropriate for a park layout) and 'a avenue' (which should be 'an avenue'). While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited. To improve, try to use a wider variety of verbs to describe change, such as 'transformed', 'converted', 'demolished', or 'introduced', and pay closer attention to basic articles and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'their are many things' (should be 'there are'), 'seats that has been installed' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'water feature is also be made' (incorrect passive construction). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to lower the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, correct verb tenses, and proofreading for basic punctuation errors will help you achieve a higher band.
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