Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The plan show a public park when it first open in 1920 and the same park today Grange Park 1920 Arnold avenue was very different from today park in 1920 there was a a same thing but in different places you see the a fountain in 1920 but in today there is no fountain in park because in today’s park were new things for playing in 1920 there was not something new because they old park and you no that when life become forward so the system will become new in park in today’s era as a technology there is a lot of facilities such as ai artificial intelligence and chat gpt and other and when life going so the facilities were become high and good and park system were changed time by time and there was a entrance underground car parking but in 1920 there is no car with anyone and also parking have .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately address the task. While it mentions the park, it does not provide a clear summary of the main features or comparisons between the 1920 and current plans. Instead, the text drifts into irrelevant personal commentary about artificial intelligence and ChatGPT, which is not present in the source material. The description of the park's features is fragmented and lacks the necessary detail to provide a clear overview. To improve, you must focus strictly on the provided visual data, identifying key changes such as the addition of the rose garden, the removal of the fountain, and the introduction of the underground car park.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization and progression. There is no paragraphing, and the sentences are strung together with repetitive conjunctions like 'and' or 'but', making the text difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, leading to a disjointed flow. For example, the transition from discussing the park to talking about modern technology is abrupt and confusing. To achieve a higher score, you should structure your report with an introduction, a clear overview of the main trends, and separate paragraphs for specific details, using a variety of linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying on basic words like 'things', 'new', and 'good'. There are significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'life become forward' and 'facilities were become high'. The inclusion of irrelevant terms like 'artificial intelligence' and 'chat gpt' demonstrates a lack of awareness regarding the appropriate register for an academic task. To improve, you should learn topic-specific vocabulary related to describing maps and changes, such as 'transformed', 'replaced', 'constructed', and 'demolished', and avoid using informal or irrelevant language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The plan show'), tense usage (e.g., 'in 1920 there is no car'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, lacking proper punctuation. The lack of control over basic grammar makes the text difficult to read. To improve, focus on mastering simple sentence structures first, ensuring correct verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, before attempting more complex grammatical forms. Proofreading for basic errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms is essential.

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