Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The maps illustrates the changes that have taken place in Grange park between 1920 and present day.
Overall, the park has gone under several redevelopment with a number of original features removed or relocated. and a number of recreational facilities being introduced.
In 1920, the park contained a stage for musician in the western part, while a fountain was situated in the Centre. There were 3 rose gardens, located in north-west, south-west, and north-east corners. Seating were positioned around the perimeter, and two entrances provided access from Arnold Avenue in the north and Eldon Street in the south. A glasshouse occupied the south-eastern corner, while a pond for water plants was located on north-east.
Today, the western section of the park has been transformed into an Amphitheatre for concerts, replacing the stage for musician. The central fountain is reconstructed into a rose garden which has seating facility around its perimeter. In the north-east corner, the pond has been replaced by playing area for children, while a cafe is have been added in replacement of rose garden. The glasshouse and seating facility of south-eastern corner are removed and a water feature is added. In addition, an entrance to an underground car park has been constructed in the south-eastern part of the park.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response covers all key features of the maps, effectively highlighting the transformation from 1920 to the present day. You have successfully identified the major changes, such as the replacement of the stage with an amphitheatre and the conversion of the pond into a play area. The overview provides a clear summary of the redevelopment. To reach a higher band, ensure that all comparisons are precise; for instance, you mention the cafe replacing a rose garden, but the map shows the cafe replaced the glasshouse area. Overall, the information is well-selected and the main trends are clearly reported, meeting the requirements for a high band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing the past and present states. The progression of information is easy to follow. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In 1920', 'Today', and 'In addition' to link ideas. However, there are minor issues with punctuation and sentence structure, such as the fragmented sentence '...or relocated. and a number of recreational facilities...'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring punctuation is accurate would enhance the flow and cohesion of the response, moving it toward a higher band.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary appropriate for describing maps, such as 'redevelopment', 'perimeter', 'transformed', and 'constructed'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'stage for musician' (should be 'musicians') and 'cafe is have been added' (grammatical error affecting lexical clarity). While the range is sufficient to convey meaning precisely, there is a slight lack of flexibility in some descriptions. Incorporating more varied synonyms for 'replaced' or 'removed' would further strengthen this criterion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While many sentences are clear, there are several grammatical errors that slightly impede the flow. Examples include 'The maps illustrates' (subject-verb agreement), 'gone under several redevelopment' (incorrect preposition/noun form), 'Seating were' (subject-verb agreement), and 'cafe is have been added' (incorrect verb tense). These errors are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage when describing past and present states.
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