Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This illustration shows the side to side comparison between current and old layout of Grange Park.

Grange Park at it's opening in 1920 looked a lot different than today. Center and right side of the park has been completely changed from the past and on the left side, a rose garden is only marking that has been left of the 1920's park.

In the first depiction, there was a fountain in the center of the park and two entrances on the front and rear part of it, one linked the park to Arnold Avenue and the opposite entrance opened on the Eldon Street. There was a flower orchard on the left side of Arnold Avenue entrance and a pond for water plants followed by it. A glasshouse was present on the opposite of pond. In the right half of the park there was a place for musicians to perform. Multiple sitting areas and two more gardens also can be seen.

In present time's park, a rose garden along with sitting areas all around it has replaced the central fountain. Right side of the park has been completely revamped; a play area for the kids, an eatery and a water feature has been added. Moreover there is an underground parking for visitors. On the left side of park a huge theater is added also.

Overall, the park has been modernized with a little glimpse of the past, like a rose garden on the left.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all key features of the two maps, providing a clear comparison between the 1920 layout and the present day. You successfully identified major changes, such as the removal of the fountain and the addition of the underground parking and theater. However, the overview is somewhat brief and could be more analytical by highlighting the most significant transformation—the shift from a nature-focused park to a more facility-heavy recreational space. While the main features are reported, the description of the 1920 layout is slightly cluttered with minor details, which slightly obscures the overall trend of the development.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, moving from an introduction to the past, then the present, and a concluding summary. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In the first depiction', 'In present time's park', and 'Moreover', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally imprecise, such as 'followed by it' or 'opposite of pond'. Improving the flow between sentences would help the text feel more natural and cohesive, moving it toward a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'revamped', 'modernized', and 'depiction'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'side to side comparison' (should be 'side-by-side'), 'flower orchard' (likely a flower garden), and 'opposite of pond' (should be 'opposite the pond'). While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the precision of your writing. To reach a higher band, focus on using more sophisticated collocations and ensuring that nouns and prepositions are used accurately in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'at it's opening' (should be 'its'), 'Center and right side... has been' (should be 'have been'), and 'a rose garden is only marking' (should be 'the only marking'). Additionally, there are minor issues with article usage, such as 'on the left side of park'. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding the information. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will improve this score.

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