Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given plans illustrates a public park when it first opened in 1920 and same park today :

In 1920, there are three rose gardens, a fountain, an enterance, a pond for water plants, a glasshouse, a stage for musicians there is an entrance from eldon street, whereas today, there are two enterances, two rose gardens surrounded with four seats , a cafe, children's play area, amphitheatres for concerts, a water feature

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 72 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While you have identified some key features of the park in 1920 and today, the description lacks the necessary depth, analysis, and comparison required for an Academic Task 1 response. You have not provided an overview or a summary of the main trends, which is essential for a higher band score. To improve, you must expand your description by grouping features logically and providing a clear comparison between the two time periods.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is written as a single, fragmented paragraph, which hinders the logical flow of information. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas together; for example, the transition between the 1920 description and the current layout is abrupt. The use of punctuation is also problematic, with a colon used incorrectly and a lack of full stops to separate distinct ideas. To improve, you should organize your report into clear paragraphs—typically an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs—and use linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You have used basic terms like 'there are' and 'there is' repeatedly, which does not demonstrate the range required for higher bands. There are also spelling errors, such as 'enterance' (entrance) and 'amphitheatres' (which should be singular or pluralized correctly based on the plan). To improve, try to use more precise verbs to describe changes, such as 'replaced', 'converted', or 'expanded', and ensure you check your spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are subject-verb agreement issues, such as 'plans illustrates' (should be 'plans illustrate') and 'there are three rose gardens... there is an entrance' (which is a run-on sentence). The sentence structure is simplistic and lacks the variety of complex structures needed for a higher score. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using correct punctuation to separate your ideas into distinct, grammatically sound sentences.

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