Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two diagrammatic graph compares the layout of both phases prior to verses after organizations of a public park, as it seems at the present era

The Grange park opened in 1920, including entrance from two streets one is Arnold Avenue, while other one is Eldon Street common in both phases of the park. Other most familiar things are rose garden and seats, nevertheless, both time period of the park no doubt were unique and attractive.

Grange park in 1920 make us the reminds of ancient time when people were old fashioned and prepared structure of the park were absolutely fair enough for them, as we entered the park there was a huge fountain at the centre of the park that grabbed the visitors attention simultaneously. On the left side of the park were decorated with rose garden on the both sides between which there was a space for the Stage for musicians and the glasshouse is also available for having fun alone with the pond for water plants to add joy for the people.

At present day, the park has been designed according to the modern era. It's infrastructure is like at the entrance, there's a rose garden along with the seats on the four sides of the garden that automatically attracts tourists, moreover on the left side amphitheatre has been created for concert as visitors enjoyed themselves, however on the right side there are café, play area for children and water feature are added as well. One thing that distinguished both phases is underground car parking is also available now onwards.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the park in both 1920 and the present day. You successfully identified key changes, such as the addition of the amphitheatre, café, and underground parking. However, the report lacks a clear 'overview' paragraph, which is essential for Task 1. Instead of summarizing the most significant trends (e.g., the shift from a nature-focused layout to a more facility-oriented one), you provided a narrative description. To improve, ensure you include a distinct overview that highlights the major transformations rather than just listing details. The tone is also slightly informal, which is less appropriate for an Academic Task 1 report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression from the past to the present. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or misused. For example, phrases like 'Grange park in 1920 make us the reminds of ancient time' are awkward and disrupt the flow. The transition between ideas within paragraphs could be smoother; some sentences feel like a list of features rather than a cohesive analysis. Improving the use of linking words such as 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'in contrast' would help create a more logical structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the park's features, such as 'fountain', 'amphitheatre', and 'underground car parking'. However, there are several instances of inaccurate word choice and collocation, such as 'diagrammatic graph' (the image is a map/plan) and 'prepared structure of the park were absolutely fair enough'. These errors occasionally hinder the clarity of your writing. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise terminology for describing spatial changes and avoid informal phrasing like 'having fun alone'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The two diagrammatic graph compares'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'prior to verses after organizations'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your sentence structures are grammatically sound.

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