Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The image depicts the grange park first opened in 1920 Arnold avenue and current image with some reconstruction.
Overall, the underground entrance for the car park has been constructed to the right side of the main entrance of the park in Eldon street.
To commence with, there are 5 seats in the park along with 2 rose garden beside the seats in left side, and with stage for musicians, a fountain, a glass house for visitors in the right corner of park, and a moderate pond for water plants near the Arnold avenue in opposite way of the glasshouse.
Moreover, the current layout of the Grange park has been fully developed with a lot of joyful things for visitors example children's play area along with a water feature near the car parking entrance near a cafe also constructed and a vast Amphitheatre for concerts inside the park, and a rose garden in the middle of the park.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response identifies the main features of the park in 1920 and the present day. However, the description is somewhat disjointed and lacks a clear, comparative overview. While you mention the underground car park, the summary of the 1920 layout is cluttered and lacks precise spatial relationships. The comparison between the two time periods is underdeveloped; for example, you list features of the 1920 park and then the current park separately rather than highlighting the significant changes (such as the removal of the rose gardens or the addition of the amphitheatre). To improve, ensure you group information logically and provide a clearer synthesis of the changes.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate, such as 'in opposite way of the glasshouse', which is confusing. The transition between the 1920 description and the current layout is abrupt. While there is an attempt to use linking words like 'To commence with' and 'Moreover', the internal structure of the sentences often lacks flow, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial layout of the park effectively. Improving the use of referencing and spatial markers would enhance the clarity of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. You rely on simple descriptors like 'joyful things' and 'moderate pond', which are not ideal for a formal report. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'the image depicts the grange park'. To reach a higher band, you should use more specific terminology related to maps and urban planning, such as 'transformed', 'replaced', 'situated', or 'adjacent to'. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and nouns will help you convey the changes more professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. For instance, 'the underground entrance for the car park has been constructed to the right side' is grammatically acceptable, but phrases like 'with stage for musicians' and 'in opposite way of the glasshouse' are missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage in long, run-on sentences. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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