Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The map chart illustrates the grange park changes between 1920 and the recently.

Overall, it can be clearly seen that the rose garden is locate in the same place during the two different years. Conversely, the fountain located on in the center of map in the initial year but now it was demolished .

Analysing the map charts into more detail, in the 1920 the pond for water plants and seats were constructed in the right corner of the map but, now it was totally demolished and the children's play area as well as water feature build on the same place

Moving towards the remaining information into more detail, in 1920 the fountain located in the middle of the map ,whereas today the rose garden and seats were erect on this area. Furthermore, in 1920 the stage for musicians located on the north-east side of the map and now this area converted into Amphitheatre for concerts . Another important aspect is that the entrance was built on the the north-south corner of the map from 1920 to today.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the park in 1920 and today, identifying key changes such as the demolition of the fountain and the addition of the amphitheatre. However, the report is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While the main features are mentioned, the description of the layout is occasionally confusing, such as the reference to the 'north-south corner', which is imprecise. To reach a higher band, you should focus on grouping information more logically—perhaps by area or by the nature of the changes—rather than listing them sequentially. Ensure that all comparisons are accurate and clearly linked to the provided visual data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and occasionally mechanical (e.g., 'Moving towards the remaining information'). There are also issues with referencing; for example, 'the map' is used repeatedly, which makes the text feel slightly monotonous. The logical progression is present but could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to show contrast and addition more naturally. Paragraphing is used, but the internal structure of the paragraphs could be more cohesive to better guide the reader through the spatial changes.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. You rely on basic verbs like 'built', 'erect' (which is grammatically incorrect here), and 'converted'. There are also some word-choice errors, such as 'the recently' instead of 'recent times' and 'locate' instead of 'located'. To improve, try to incorporate more specific vocabulary related to map descriptions, such as 'transformed', 'replaced', 'situated', or 'extended'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated or varied lexical items limits the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'the rose garden is locate' (should be 'located'), 'the fountain located on in the center' (redundant prepositions), and 'seats were erect' (should be 'erected'). Additionally, there are issues with article usage ('the map' used excessively) and tense consistency. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct passive voice construction will significantly improve your accuracy.

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