Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

These pictures represents the map of an park which was opened in 1920 and then it is modified or changed after some time.

so when the park was built the main entrancer was at the center at the both ends but the fountain was changed with rose garden at the center along with seats on its each side.

and then there was a stage for musicians at the left side of fountain which was replaced with the amphitheater for concerts which is a major change in the map.

and before there was 2 parts of rose garden at each end of stage, but it was moved in the center, altho all the seats wich are on diff cornors are moved toward the center of the park with the side of rose garden.

if we talk about the pond it was replaced with a cafe and an area for children play and on its right side or bottom of the park now there is and water feature along with the entrance from the car park and the right bottom side.

so, in cocclusion the park is changed in a positive way they addeda cafe and an entrance form parking which i think its a great changed and this map also make it easy and comfortable for the people to spend some time easily with there faimly

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response identifies the main features of the park in 1920 and today, such as the amphitheater, the cafe, and the rose garden. However, the report lacks a clear overview, which is essential for Task 1. The description is somewhat disorganized, jumping between different areas of the park without a clear spatial logic. While the major changes are mentioned, the comparison is not fully developed, and the inclusion of personal opinion ('which i think its a great changed') is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report, which requires an objective summary of the data provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'and then' and 'and'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, for example, 'the right bottom side' is vague, and the transition between the 1920 layout and the current layout is disjointed. The conclusion is also problematic as it introduces personal commentary rather than summarizing the key trends observed in the maps.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'entrancer' instead of 'entrance', 'cornors' instead of 'corners', and 'faimly' instead of 'family'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the changes with precision; for instance, using 'changed' repeatedly instead of more specific verbs like 'transformed', 'replaced', or 'converted'. The tone is informal and lacks the academic register required for this task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('These pictures represents'), article usage ('an park'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, such as 'altho all the seats wich are on diff cornors are moved'. The control of basic grammar is inconsistent, and the frequent errors in spelling and punctuation detract from the overall quality of the writing.

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