Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given images illustrate the layout of a public park in 1920 and today.
Overall, the grange park went undergone significant redevelopment with several amenities. There are the additions of children play area, amphitheatre and water features. Few features has been removed like fountain, stage of musician, glass house and water plants.
In 1920, park had two entrance one was the arnold avenue and other was the eldon street. A fountain was present as a center feature and the stage for musicians was present at the left of fountain. At that time, park had three rose gardens, in which two were present at the each side of arnold avenue entrance and one is located to the left side of eldon street entrance. There was a pond for water plants to the upper right corner and a glasshouse near the eldon street entrance.
Currently, the pond for water plants and a stage for musicians have been swapped with the children play area and amphitheatre for concerts. A water feature has been built at the place of glasshouse and a cafe has been established to the right of the arnold avenue entrance. A fountain has been replaced by the rose garden with seats blocks at each side. One rose garden at the upper left corner has been remained the same, while the seats around it has been removed. The entrance for undergone car park has been built at hte bottom right corner near the eldon street entrance.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers all parts of the task well by summarising the main features of the public park in 1920 and today, and makes relevant comparisons between the two periods. The overview clearly identifies the major developments, such as the introduction of the children's play area and amphitheatre, and the removal of features like the glasshouse and stage. Key details are supported by specific references to the maps, such as the rose gardens and the new cafe. While there are a few minor omissions regarding minor pathways, the overall summary is well-developed and fulfils the requirements of Task 1 effectively, aligning closely with Band 7 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay displays a clear logical organisation and progression throughout. It begins with an introductory statement, moves into a clear overall summary paragraph, then details the layout of 1920, and finally contrasts it with the current layout in the final paragraph. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'In 1920', 'Currently', and 'One rose garden at the upper left corner has been remained the same'. Paragraphing is used sufficiently and appropriately to separate distinct time periods. However, referencing and cohesive transitions are occasionally mechanical, which prevents the response from reaching a higher band score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms related to maps and urban planning such as 'redevelopment', 'amenities', 'amphitheatre', and 'established'. However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'grange park went undergone significant redevelopment' (incorrect verb combination), 'children play area' (missing possessive 'children's'), and 'seats blocks'. Spelling is generally acceptable, but lexical control is inconsistent with some awkward phrasing, placing this performance securely within the Band 6 range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms. Examples of complex structures include relative clauses and time-contrasting clauses. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'Few features has been removed' (subject-verb agreement error), 'park had two entrance' (pluralisation error), 'has been remained', and 'entrance for undergone car park'. Punctuation and articles are also occasionally misused (e.g., 'at the center feature', 'to the left of fountain'). While these errors do not impede overall communication, their frequency prevents the grammar score from rising above a Band 5.5.
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