Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given layout ilustration depict the information regarding the pen it first opened in 1920 and the same today.
Overall, it is vivid that there are many changes occure in park the main changes in the place of rose garden and the addition of childrens play.
To start with, in the past, the entrance of arnold avenue in park was in the north and the eldon street entrance in the south side. Just after the entrance had a fountain almost in the center of park.Further, in left side of the entrance had similar things between north and south like has seats just after that and rose garden in same size also had two more set of seats in west side. After that in north west side a one more rose garden and a pond for water plants near that. Additionally ,a glasshouse in the south west side of the park.
Moving toward,in todays, in park entrance occure no changes from both side.However, the fountain convert into rose garden with seats from each side. Addiontally, addition of cafe and children play area in north west side of the parrk.
Further, the glasshouse redesing in water feature.Moreover, in left side of park occure the reduction of rose garden which only left one in north side and added the amphitheatre for concerts.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student attempts to describe the main features of Grange Park comparing 1920 and today, successfully mentioning key changes such as the replacement of the fountain with a rose garden, the addition of a café, children's play area, and an amphitheatre. However, the response contains several inaccuracies and vague descriptions regarding locations. For instance, the glasshouse is described as being in the 'south west side' when it was in the south-east, and the overall summary is very brief and simplistic. The overview is underdeveloped, stating only that 'many changes occure in park', which misses a more cohesive summary of the spatial transformation. Consequently, the response fulfills the basic requirements of the task but lacks precision and fuller development, aligning with a Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs focusing on different areas of the map. However, the progression of ideas is often confusing and difficult to follow due to poor cohesive devices and mechanical linking (e.g., 'To start with', 'Moving toward, in todays, in park entrance occure no changes'). Referencing is frequently unclear, with pronouns and spatial markers like 'in left side of the entrance' used incorrectly or ambiguously. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion fails to create a smooth, logical flow, resulting in a score of 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms such as 'park', 'entrance', 'rose garden', and 'seats'. There are numerous word formation and spelling errors, such as 'ilustration' (illustration), 'pen' (when), 'occure' (occurred), 'Addiontally' (Additionally), and 'redesing' (redesigned). The student attempts some less common vocabulary like 'amphitheatre' and 'glasshouse' (taken from the prompt), but overall lexical control is limited, meaning the range is minimally adequate for the task. This places the response firmly at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The student struggles to form complete, grammatically correct sentences, frequently omitting essential verbs, subjects, or prepositions (e.g., 'Just after the entrance had a fountain', 'in left side of the entrance had similar things'). There is a heavy reliance on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex structures are invariably faulty. Punctuation and tense usage are also problematic, with inappropriate switches between past and present descriptions without clear rationale. Frequent errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader, justifying a Band 5.0.
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