Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The plans illustrate a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
In this grange park so many had facilities there such as rose garden, seats, pond for water plants, stage for musicians, fountain and glasshouse after a century in this grange park have some changes including cafe, play area or Amphitheatre for concerts and water feature.
Overall, the grange park in 1920 could indicated the Arnold Avenue entrance there were so many seats there and three rose gardens were in it. in the one corner pond for water plants were presened and the opposite from the pond for water plants. glasshouse was presented but almost five seats were there surrounding the park. in the middle of the park fountain and stage for musicians were presented.
After a long time, in this grange park have some changes such as cafe, water feature, play area or Amphitheatre for concerts are new in this park but the rose garden has only one in it, or seats are present in the middle of the grange park.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of Grange Park in 1920 and today, identifying several changes such as the addition of a café, play area, and amphitheatre. However, the response lacks a clear, well-structured overview and fails to make sufficient, precise comparisons between the two time periods as required by the task prompt. Details are often fragmented or incorrectly located, such as stating that 'seats are present in the middle of the grange park' where the rose garden actually is. Furthermore, the selection of data is somewhat disorganized, leading to a partial and underdeveloped response that aligns with a Band 5 performance.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, but the overall organization and logical progression are weak. The introduction is followed by a confusing second paragraph that crams too many features together without clear signposting. Cohesive devices are either missing or repetitive, with phrases like 'after a long time' and 'in this grange park' used awkwardly to link ideas. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships between the various park features. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is faulty, placing this response at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. The student relies heavily on simple terms from the prompt, such as 'rose garden', 'seats', 'pond for water plants', and 'stage for musicians'. There are noticeable limitations and inaccuracies in word choice and collocations, such as 'could indicated' and 'pond for water plants were presened'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with limited success ('Amphitheatre for concerts'), but frequent errors in spelling and word formation restrict the range, making Band 5 the most accurate descriptor for lexical resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple or overly convoluted run-on sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('pond for water plants were presened'), missing articles, and incorrect tense usage. Complex sentences are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to frequent errors that cause difficulty for the reader and obscure meaning in several places. This level of grammatical control corresponds to a Band 4.5 or 5.0.
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