Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The two diagrams shows a public park when it was launched in 1920 and same park how it is reconstructed in present year.
Overall, park undergo many significant changes over the years. The stage for musician which is converted in amphitheatre for concerts, while fountain got replaced by rose garden with surrounded sitting area. However, cafe, water feature , and underground parking facilities are newly introduced.
To begin with, in 1920 fountain was centre of attraction which was later replaced with rose graden with surrounded sitting. Similarly stage of musicians was reconstructed into amphitheatre for concerts. Moreover, earlier in 1920 glasshouse was at bottom but it get replaced with water feature.
A cafe is a newly facilities which is introduced for people as well as childern's play area was constructed which was not able earlier. Additionally underground parking facilities is constructed enhancing convenience for individual. However, all entrances of the park are remain untouched.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student successfully covers the main features of Grange Park in both 1920 and the present day, noting key transformations such as the replacement of the fountain with a rose garden, the conversion of the music stage into an amphitheatre, and the addition of modern amenities like a cafe, water feature, and underground parking. An overview is provided, and comparisons are made between the two periods. However, there are minor omissions or imprecise descriptions, such as stating that 'all entrances of the park are remain untouched' when the south-east entrance now leads to an underground car park. Overall, the task is addressed adequately, placing it firmly in Band 6.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into four paragraphs, following a logical structure with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing specific changes. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'To begin with', 'Similarly', and 'However' are used to guide the reader through the comparisons. Paragraphing is used appropriately, and there is a clear overall progression. However, referencing and cohesion are occasionally mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'which was not able earlier', which affects the smoothness of the flow. Consequently, a Band 6.0 is appropriate for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully employing terms like 'reconstructed', 'amphitheatre', 'amenities', and 'transformations' (implied). However, there are several noticeable lexical and spelling errors, such as 'graden' instead of 'garden', 'childern's' instead of 'children's', and awkward collocations like 'newly facilities' and 'not able earlier'. These errors do not impede communication, as the meaning remains clear, but they prevent the response from achieving a higher band. Therefore, a Band 5.5 is awarded.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writing includes a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures like relative clauses ('The stage for musician which is converted...') and passive voice ('was later replaced'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The two diagrams shows', 'entrances of the park are remain'), missing articles ('fountain was centre of attraction'), and awkward verb forms ('park undergo', 'it get replaced'). While communication is not severely impeded, the high frequency of basic grammatical errors places this response at Band 5.0.
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