Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
THE GIVEN MAPS ILLUSTRATE THE INFORMATION ABOUT LAYOUT OF GRANGR PARK FIRST OPEN IN 1920 AND CURRENTLY, HOW IT KOOKS AFTER DEVELOPMENT .
TO START WITH, IN 1920, THE GRAND PARK WAS BUILT IN RECTANGULAR SHAPE. THE ENTRANCE WAS IN THE NORTH DIRECTION AND ROSE GARDEN WAS SITUATED ON THE RIGHT SIDE NEAR THE POND FOR WATER PLANTS .IN THE CENTRE OF THE GARDEN FOUNTAIN WAS LOCATED AS WELL AS STAGE FOR MUSICIANS.ANOTHER ENTRANCE WAS ON THE SOUTH SIDE ATTACHED WITH GLASSHOUSE. THERE WAS THREE SEATS,ROSE GARDEN AREAS WERE LOCATED ON DIFFERENT PLACES.
MOVING FURTHER,THE PRESENT, SEVERAL CHANGES TOOK PLACE.BOTH ENTRANCE HAVE BEEN ON THE SAME PLACE. POND, ROSE GARDEN FROM THE NORTH EAST SIDE HAS BEEN REMOVED AND CHIRDRENS PLAYGROUND OR CAFE HAS BEEN CONSTRUCTED.GLASSHOUSE HAS BEEN REPLACED INTO WATER FEATURE.FOUNTAIN REPLACED INTO RISE GARDEN WITH FOUR SEATS .AMPHITHEATRE FOR CONCERTS HAS BEEN MANUFACTURED IN THE WEST SIDE.
OVERALL, THERE ARE MANY CHANGES HAS BEEN TOOK PLACE . FOUNTAIN,GLASSHOUSE,POND HAS BEEN REMOVED AND CHILDREN PLAY AREA,CAFE HAS BEEN CONSTRUCTED .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to summarise the main changes between the 1920 park and the current layout. It covers several key features such as the fountain being replaced by a rose garden, the glasshouse becoming a water feature, and the addition of a cafe and children's play area. However, there are some inaccuracies and omissions in the reporting of specific locations and features, such as misidentifying the position of certain rose gardens and generalising spatial relationships. Furthermore, the overview lacks precision and contains grammatical interference that obscures some comparisons. It meets the basic requirements of Task Achievement but remains at a Band 5.5 level due to under-developed comparisons and minor descriptive inaccuracies.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into four paragraphs: an introduction, a body paragraph for 1920, a body paragraph for the present day, and an overall summary. There is a basic attempt at logical progression using transition markers such as 'TO START WITH' and 'MOVING FURTHER'. However, the flow is frequently disrupted by mechanical and repetitive cohesive devices, faulty punctuation, and poor paragraph integration. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when describing spatial shifts from the older map to the modern layout. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion lacks flexibility and natural progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with several spelling errors (e.g., 'GRANGR PARK', 'KOOKS', 'CHIRDRENS', 'RISE GARDEN') and word-form issues. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary related to maps and changes (e.g., 'CONSTRUCTED', 'REPLACED', 'MANUFACTURED'), word choice is often imprecise or unnatural (e.g., 'glasshouse has been replaced into water feature' instead of 'replaced by'). The lexical range is adequate for a basic summary but lacks the precision, flexibility, and control required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent errors in verb tense and agreement, such as 'several changes took place', 'both entrance have been on the same place', and 'many changes has been took place'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after commas and erratic capitalisation throughout the text. These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar firmly in the Band 5 category.
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