Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The plans is demostrating a public park when it was firstly opened in1920 and the recent park development that changed now.
Overall this map is showing the change in the structure of the park which is more well establish in the present era. In 1920 both corner of the park has a rose garden and in the middle there is small space is left for stage for musicains . But now it was replaced by the huge space called as Amphitheatre for concert.
Recently map has a Rose Garden which is in the middle of the park and there is plenty of seating area around the park from where we can see the water feature as well. In 1920 there is a fountain in the center of the park. Along with that we can also see children play area in recent development of park which is a good addition for kids.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The candidate attempts to summarise the main features of Grange Park in 1920 and today, noting changes such as the replacement of the fountain with a rose garden and the addition of an amphitheatre and children's play area. However, the response lacks a clear, fully developed overview of the general trends. Several key features are missed or imprecisely described, such as the removal of the glasshouse and the pond, and the descriptions of spatial layout contain inaccuracies. The coverage of the visual data is partial rather than comprehensive, placing this response firmly in the band 5 range.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into three brief paragraphs, attempting an overall introduction and body sections. However, the logical progression is weak and transitions between ideas feel abrupt. Cohesive devices are minimal or repetitive; for instance, the phrase 'Recently map' is unnatural and confusingly used. Paragraphing is rudimentary, and referencing within sentences (such as 'there is small space is left') is frequently faulty. This demonstrates the characteristics of a band 5 response for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice and collocation errors. Examples include 'demostrating' instead of 'demonstrating', 'more well establish' instead of 'better established', and referring to the map as 'Recently map'. There are also awkward expressions like 'called as Amphitheatre for concert'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic topic of park changes, the noticeable errors and limited range restrict the score to band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences with frequent basic errors. Examples of inaccurate grammar include subject-verb agreement errors ('The plans is demostrating'), tense confusion ('when it was firstly opened in1920 and the recent park development that changed now'), and missing articles or prepositions ('there is small space is left'). These errors occur throughout the text and frequently cause strain for the reader, placing the grammar at a band 4.5 to 5 level.
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