Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The first picture show that there is the park which constract on 1920 and the other pic is today pic.We show that their is a lot of difference between two pics.The main entrance is same but In 1920 there was the rose garden on left side but today it replace with a cafe that is good .In 1920 after the rose garden the pond of water plants was situted but today that replace with children play area that attract the children a lot.In 1920 there was a fountain in the middle of the park but today that replace with rose garden and seats that not good . In 1920 there was the small stage for musicians but today that converted into concerts area that is appricateable work.The entrance of Eldon street a little bit change .We can see that there was the glass house on the rightside but that replqce with water feature that so well. Overall we can saw that today park is much better then 1920 park.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to describe the changes to Grange Park between 1920 and today. While the writer identifies several key features such as the replacement of the fountain with a rose garden and seats, the stage with an amphitheatre, and the pond with a children's play area, the overview of main trends is missing. Furthermore, the inclusion of personal opinions ('that is good', 'that not good', 'that so well') is inappropriate for an academic Task 1 response, which requires an objective, factual summary. The description contains some inaccuracies in spatial locations and lacks the structured overview expected at Band 5 or above.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is written as a single dense paragraph, lacking proper paragraphing which is a core requirement for a well-structured task response. Cohesive devices are extremely limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic time markers like 'In 1920' and 'today' at the start of almost every sentence. The progression of ideas lacks logical flow, moving back and forth between different areas of the park without a clear organisational plan. Referencing is also weak, with ambiguous pronouns such as 'that' used repeatedly to refer back to clauses rather than specific nouns.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently reusing terms like 'rose garden', 'fountain', 'seats', and 'entrance'. There are numerous word choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'constract on 1920', 'pic', 'situted', and 'replqce'. The writer also relies on informal, conversational filler phrases like 'that is good' and 'that so well' which are unsuitable for an academic report. The lexical range is severely limited and inadequate for discussing map transformations with precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple sentences or poorly constructed compound-complex sentences with major structural errors. There are frequent, severe errors in verb tense, voice, and agreement, such as 'The first picture show', 'there is the park which constract', 'today it replace', and 'today that replace with rose garden'. Punctuation is also problematic, including missing spaces after full stops and comma splices. These persistent errors frequently strain the reader and impede comprehension.
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