Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The comparison between the public park opened in 1920 and the same park today is depicted by the given diagrams.
Overall the prima facie glance makes it quite evident that park has undergone a massive transformation with some things being relocated, some being added and changes in number of some things.
Scrutinising deeper into obtainable information, the number of rose gardens which were three, has been reduced to two. The stage for musicians has been removed, and amphitheatre for concerts has been introduced there. Also the fountain is removed, and a bigger rose garden with seats around it is constructed. The pond has been relocated right adjacent to ELDON STREE and a dedicated area for children has been introduced there.
Digging deeper into the chart, a cafe has been opened replacing one of tAn undergroundhe rose gardens. An undergroundAn underground car park has also been constructed. Both the entrances from ARNOLD AVENUE and ELDON STREET are intact at their respective positions. water feature has been improved.
Hereby, I conclude my report.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main changes between the two maps of Grange Park, noting key alterations such as the removal of the stage and fountain, the addition of the amphitheatre and underground car park, and the relocation of features like the pond. However, the overview is somewhat weak and relies on informal phrasing rather than a clear summary of the major trends. Furthermore, there are factual inaccuracies or confusion regarding spatial locations, such as stating 'The pond has been relocated right adjacent to ELDON STREE' when the children's play area is actually in the north-east where the pond was, and the pond itself was replaced. Despite these minor errors, the main features are generally reported.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response has an overall arrangement that makes some sense, but the paragraphing and cohesion are quite faulty. The introduction is followed by an overly conversational and clunky overview paragraph. The body paragraphs are disjointed and contain broken sentences, such as 'An undergroundAn underground car park has also been constructed' and 'water feature has been improved' dangling at the end of a paragraph. Cohesive devices are used mechanically ('Scrutinising deeper', 'Digging deeper'), and referencing is occasionally unclear.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student attempts some less common vocabulary items such as 'prima facie glance', 'massive transformation', and 'scrutinising', but their usage is sometimes awkward or unnatural in an Academic Task 1 context. There are also noticeable lexical errors and typos, such as 'amphitheatre' missing an article ('an amphitheatre'), 'ELDON STREE' with a missing letter, and repetitive phrasing ('some things being relocated, some being added and changes in number of some things'). The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control is inconsistent. There are several glaring mechanical and grammatical errors, most notably the duplicated and jumbled text 'tAn undergroundhe' and 'An undergroundAn underground car park'. Sentence boundaries and word forms are occasionally mishandled, such as 'amphitheatre for concerts has been introduced there' lacking necessary articles, and sentence fragments like 'water feature has been improved' lacking a subject. These errors occasionally impede smooth reading.
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