Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The two diagrams illustrate the layout of a park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
Overall, the park has been modernized and upgraded. It involves various facilities such as a cafe, an amphitheatre for concerts, children's playing area and car parking. In contrast, there are several sections whose position is left unchanged.
In 1920, there was a fountain in the center of the park, which has now been replaced with a rose garden. Additionally, there were several seats located at the edges of the garden in 1920. The four seats have now been relocated around the rose garden in the center and is removed. Moreover, there was a stage for musicians on the western side of the park, which is replaced with an amphitheatre for concerts. However, rose garden on southern side of an amphitheatre is removed.
On the other hand, in 1920, there was a rose garden on the north-east side of the garden, which has now been replaced with a cafe. In addition, there was a pond for water plants just beside the rose garden in 1920, which has now been demolished and area is used as a children's play area. Similarly, on the south-eastern side of the park, there was a glasshouse. It has now been replaced with a water feature. An additional facility like underground car parking is included on the eastern side of the park. Meanwhile, the location of north-western rose garden and both the entrances was remained unchanged.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The student successfully covers all parts of the task, providing a clear overview of the changes in Grange Park between 1920 and today. The main features are appropriately selected and reported, such as the replacement of the fountain with a rose garden, the addition of the amphitheatre, and the changes regarding the cafe and children's play area. Comparisons are made where relevant, and the general trend of modernization is clearly stated. However, there are minor confusions in specific details, such as stating that 'the four seats have now been relocated around the rose garden in the center and is removed,' which contains a contradiction. Overall, the response fulfills the requirements of Task 1 well.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized logically into four paragraphs, starting with an introduction and overall statement, followed by body paragraphs detailing specific structural changes. Cohesive devices are used to guide the reader, such as 'Overall,' 'In contrast,' 'Additionally,' 'Moreover,' and 'On the other hand.' Paragraphing is used appropriately to group related spatial features together. However, some referencing is slightly faulty or confusing, for example, the transition regarding the seats and the sentence 'However, rose garden on southern side of an amphitheatre is removed' lacks an article and clarity regarding spatial relationships. Progression is generally clear throughout.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for describing maps and spatial changes, utilizing words such as 'modernized,' 'upgraded,' 'replaced,' 'demolished,' and 'relocated.' Less common lexical items are attempted, including 'amphitheatre,' 'glasshouse,' and 'underground car parking.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice, phrasing, and collocation, such as 'children's playing area' instead of 'play area,' and missing articles like 'rose garden on southern side.' Spelling is generally accurate, and vocabulary errors do not impede overall communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, using relative clauses ('which has now been replaced') and introductory prepositional phrases effectively. There are, however, several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the four seats... and is removed') and missing articles ('on southern side,' 'area is used as'). Despite these errors, the complex sentences demonstrate a reasonable range of structures, and the mistakes rarely impede communication or obscure the overall meaning.
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