Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The two diagrams illustrate the layout of a park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Overall, the park has been modernized and upgraded. It involves various facilities such as a cafe, an amphitheatre for concerts, children's playing area and car parking. In contrast, there are several sections whose position is left unchanged.

In 1920, there was a fountain in the center of the park, which has now been replaced with a rose garden. Additionally, there were several seats located at the edges of the garden in 1920. The four seats have now been relocated around the rose garden in the center and one seat is removed. Moreover, there was a stage for musicians on the western side of the park, which is replaced with an amphitheatre for concerts. However, rose garden on southern side of an amphitheatre is removed.

On the other hand, in 1920, there was a rose garden on the north-east side of the garden, which has now been replaced with a cafe. In addition, there was a pond for water plants just beside the rose garden in 1920, which has now been demolished and area is used as a children's play area. Similarly, on the south-eastern side of the park, there was a glasshouse. It has now been replaced with a water feature. An additional facility like underground car parking is included on the eastern side of the park. Meanwhile, the location of north-western rose garden and both the entrances was remained unchanged.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The student covers all parts of the task well, providing a clear summary of the main features of Grange Park in 1920 and today. Key transformations are identified, such as the replacement of the fountain with a rose garden, the addition of the amphitheatre, and the conversion of the pond into a children's play area. An appropriate overview is included in the second paragraph, highlighting modernization, new amenities, and unchanged areas. While a few minor details are slightly misread—for instance, stating that a rose garden south of the amphitheatre was removed, whereas the map shows a rose garden replaced by the amphitheatre itself—the overall selection and reporting of information are accurate, well-supported, and directly addressed to the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The response is logically organised with a clear overall progression from introduction to overview, and then detailed body paragraphs comparing specific areas. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the northern and southern/eastern changes. Cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'Additionally', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand' are employed to guide the reader through the spatial comparisons. Although referencing is mostly clear, a few cohesive links feel slightly mechanical or repetitive, and some minor awkwardness occurs in transitional phrases, such as 'area is used as a children's play area' lacking an article. Overall, the logical structure and clear progression support effective communication.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate to good range of vocabulary suitable for describing maps and spatial changes, using terms like 'modernized', 'upgraded', 'relocated', 'demolished', and 'unchanged'. Less common lexical items are attempted with some success, such as 'amphitheatre', 'glasshouse', and 'underground car parking'. However, there are occasional word choice and collocation inaccuracies, such as 'children's playing area' instead of 'play area', and missing articles like 'area is used as'. Despite these minor flaws, the lexical range is sufficient to convey precise spatial information and comparisons.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The student displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and passive structures effectively (e.g., 'which has now been replaced with a rose garden', 'which is replaced with an amphitheatre'). There are frequent error-free sentences, demonstrating good control over past and present tenses needed for a then-and-now comparison. However, a few grammatical errors persist, such as article omissions ('area is used as a children's play area', 'rose garden on southern side') and a minor tense/agreement slip in the final sentence ('was remained unchanged'). These errors do not impede communication, placing the response comfortably in Band 6.5 to 7.0.

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