Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The two diagrams illustrate the layout of a park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Overall, the park has been modernized and upgraded. It involves various facilities such as a cafe, an amphitheatre for concerts, children's playing area and car parking. In contrast, there are several sections whose position is left unchanged.

In 1920, there was a fountain in the center of the park, which has now been replaced with a rose garden. Additionally, there were several seats located at the edges of the garden in 1920. The four seats have now been relocated around the rose garden in the center and one seat is removed. Moreover, there was a stage for musicians on the western side of the park, which is replaced with an amphitheatre for concerts. However, rose garden on southern side of an amphitheatre is removed.

On the other hand, in 1920, there was a rose garden on the north-east side of the garden, which has now been replaced with a cafe. In addition, there was a pond for water plants just beside the rose garden in 1920, which has now been demolished and area is used as a children's play area. Similarly, on the south-eastern side of the park, there was a glasshouse. It has now been replaced with a water feature. An additional facility like underground car parking is included on the eastern side of the park. Meanwhile, the location of north-western rose garden and both the entrances was remained unchanged.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features of Grange Park in both 1920 and today, providing clear comparisons between the two periods. The overview effectively highlights the modernization of the park, including new facilities such as a café and an amphitheatre, while correctly noting areas that remained unchanged, such as the northwestern rose garden and the entrances. Key features like the removal of the fountain and glasshouse are accurately captured. While a few minor location details could be slightly more precise (for instance, the café is located where a northern rose garden used to be, not the northeast corner), the overall response is fully developed, accurate, and satisfies all requirements of Academic Task 1.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear overall progression from the introduction to the overview, followed by detailed body paragraphs comparing specific features. Cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'Additionally', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand' are used to connect ideas effectively and guide the reader smoothly through the spatial changes. Paragraphing is logical and functional, separating the general overview from the specific comparisons of the northern and southern areas. Referencing is generally clear, though occasional transitional phrasing could be slightly more natural.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate to good range of vocabulary suitable for describing maps and spatial changes, utilizing terms such as 'layout', 'modernized', 'demolished', 'relocated', and 'underground car parking'. There are occasional slight lexical inaccuracies, such as 'children's playing area' instead of 'play area', and a minor article omission ('rose garden on southern side'). However, the vocabulary is more than sufficient to convey precise meanings and comparisons without impeding communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response employs a good mix of simple and complex sentence structures, including relative clauses ('which has now been replaced') and passive voice constructions ('is included', 'has now been demolished'). Grammatical control is generally strong, though there are a few minor errors such as awkward passive phrasing ('the location of northwestern rose garden and both the entrances was remained unchanged'). These infrequent errors do not impede communication, and the majority of complex sentences are well-formed.

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